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September 12, 2018 at 7:40 am
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Sophie Jonas-Hill
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Hi Squidge!
Good point about moving him into the house, I have added ‘Once inside the door’ to make that clear, and I’ve had a bit of a tweak with his speech, but he is also trying to sound more respectable than he is, because (not a huge spoiler!) he’s putting on an act to her, but I’ve added in a bit more ‘innits!’
Cheerz!