Reply To: As an opening…

About Forums Den of Writers Critiques As an opening… Reply To: As an opening…

#1123
Squidge
Participant

Thanks Kate, Mad.

Actually, I reckon your way would work too, Mad. I suppose it depends what it is you’re trying to emphasise in the opener – for me, it was the fact that Tilda’s been trying to get this bloomin’ illuminorb right for so long, whereas depending on how you worded the next bit, your suggestion might focus attention on Silviu and his lack of patience?

I do find it interesting how we’d all approach things slightly differently. But then, it’d be a boring world of books if we didn’t!