Reply To: As an opening…

About Forums Den of Writers Critiques As an opening… Reply To: As an opening…

Mad Iguana

That’s very true, Squidge. TBH, I’d say I’d re-write it about fifty times before I got anywhere and then probably end up with the first version in the end.
I think, given your focus, your approach is accurate. What I was trying to do was remove the certainty of her having succeeded on the 27th go.