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Elle
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Thanks Philippa, that’s really useful especially your feedback about the scene after the big turning point, I can see how it can feel flat compared to what’s just before so I’m reworking it making it shorter and more to the point.

Also I’ll try to work it some more “wolf” reference about Jezza, maybe referring to him as the leader of the pack or comparing his laughter to a snarl…

Once again thanks a lot!