Reply To: Den monthly competition September 2018

#2002
Daedalus
Participant

Thanks John. Mostly I meant that you make us feel what it was like so well, the few places where you just tell us something directly stood out – e.g. ‘but the loss of his attendance bonus would have been intolerable’ – I would have preferred a sense of what intolerable meant to them. But it’s a seriously picky point for such a short word count and it’s a lovely bit of writing however you look at it