Richard, that was good/awful. Works very well as it’s Rosalind’s pov so the abandonment of grammar, punctuation etc makes perfect sense. I think upthread examples of where violence is done well was requested: to my mind, one of the best (and it’s really hideous) egs of a violent scene is the torture scene in Day of the Jackal. But as far as I remember it’s written from an omniscient narrator or third person or whatever the tech term is – anyway, not from inside anyone’s head. I know that’s considered old fashioned these days. But it’s genuinely compelling, though hard to read, and that’s coming from someone who literally can’t bear to watch anything violent on the TV.