I love this thread!
Richard, wow, brilliant writing. That disjointedness works so well.
Whenever I have to write violence I think of Silence of the Lambs, when you really don’t see/read that much, but the tension is huge. Lots of small suggestions can build on our inner fears.
Janeshuff, so happy that you’ve found the solution! Now, all you have to do is write it. Easy, right? *ducks*