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Elle
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@StellaOlivetti – thank you for your feedback and please don’t feel back about nitpicking. I like nitpicking, I want nitpicking because that’s what’s going to help me improve on my story so all your comments are very helpful!

The main reason about the grandmother being Russian is a kind of nod at Neil Gaiman and American Gods and the idea that people bring their folklore and old tales when they come over to a new country. Also the pet name she uses for her granddaughter, Lapushka means little paw in Russian so an indirect connection to the story.

@johnSAlty – thanks John that’s really helpful, especially the hoodie/hood I didn’t pick up on that and I’m always keen to tighten the narrative where possible 🙂