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Elle
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Hi Raine,

Thanks for reading and for your feedback, it is really useful.

I like your suggestion about adding tension and about trying. My idea was to show what happens when you stop trying and how quickly things can spiral if you don’t reach out to people, but I think I can work out hints at failed attempts and create some more tension.

Thank you for pointing out the jarring sentences and words, I’ll work through them.

I know how editors don’t like submission with spelling and grammar mistakes so I always want to check not English.