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John S Alty replied to the topic Making sense? in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
Thanks, everyone. Bit of a relief, back on track now. It’s the context that makes all the difference. The song is about seeking adventure now, because it’s later than you think. Eg:
Hitchhike down to Mexico,
Drive to Kathmandu,
Better do it now, my friend,
Time catches up with you.Thanks again, everyone.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Making sense? in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
Thanks Jane. The previous line, which I’m still working on, is something like:
Go now, go now, don’t hesitate, your only master’s you,
Don’t ever let yourself regret the things you didn’t do.I think in that context it’s clearer. No?
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John S Alty replied to the topic Making sense? in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
Hmm. It was intended to mean if you seek adventure now it will not be necessary to later regret not having done so, but it does seem to imply the opposite.
Good line but in the wrong song!
Jonathan, I sing like a cat with its tail in a mangle, but maybe someone else might want to sing it. My interest is in the music and words.
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John S Alty started the topic Making sense? in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
Does this line: “Don’t ever let yourself regret the things you didn’t do” immediately mean to you: Don’t regret being adventurous? When I analyse it, it seems to mean different things. Maybe context is important to the perceived meaning. It’s a song and so it needs to pan but I’m beginning to wonder if it means what I meant it to mean!
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Squidge replied to the topic Monthly comp – July 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
Bringing a gun into a house changes it.
It doesn’t matter that it’s locked away, out of sight. There’s something tangible – a weight, a tension – that comes with the knowledge of its presence, which terrifies me more than him.
He explained the gun’s for protection.
What extra protection could he need? He has his expression, his speech…his…[Read more]
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Barny replied to the topic Publishing deal!! in the forum Podium 6 years, 9 months ago
Tremendous news and tremendous writing, you Author, you!
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Kate replied to the topic Publishing deal!! in the forum Podium 6 years, 9 months ago
Fabulous. Huge congratulations.
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Squidge replied to the topic Publishing deal!! in the forum Podium 6 years, 9 months ago
Bloody fantastic news, Kaz! Well done xxx
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John S Alty replied to the topic Publishing deal!! in the forum Podium 6 years, 9 months ago
Well done, congratulations!
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly comp – July 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
Bringing a gun into the house changes it; that’s the truth. It’s not as if it was much of a gun, just an old Spanish automatic called a Ruby. Piece of junk, but cheap on the street. I never knew my dad to be scared of anything but he was scared now. Really scared.
Before, when he hit my mother, we cowered in a corner of the kitchen, my sis…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly comp – July 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
Here’s my entry, which contains mental health issues in a character under military duress. First line plus 200 words.
Bringing a gun into the house changes it.
Edward came home on leave. He was given embraces by Mother, pats on the shoulder by Father, and – foolishly, I now think – a salute by me, his brother. He laid his cap and service rev…[Read more]
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Kate replied to the topic Help with a Title, please. in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
‘Improbable life’ gets a thumbs up from me too.
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Squidge replied to the topic Monthly comp – July 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
Nice. Might have a go as I’m in between edits…
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly comp – July 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
This deadline will make me get my act together 🙂
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Libby replied to the topic Help with a Title, please. in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
I agree, keep the subtitle in. I especially like GippsGirl’s suggestion of ‘improbable’. More interesting than ‘extraordinary’ IMO, and for the reasons she states.
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Kate replied to the topic Help with a Title, please. in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
Definitely keep the subtitle in, IMO.
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Squidge replied to the topic Help with a Title, please. in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 6 years, 9 months ago
Works for me! And with the subtitle, too…
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Squidge replied to the topic Bi-Monthly Comp – May/June 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
Agree with you Raine, 100%! Loved Sandra’s start (among others!!) Well done, Sandra x
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John S Alty replied to the topic Bi-Monthly Comp – May/June 2019 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 9 months ago
Thanks for a good competition idea, Raine, and well done Sandra.
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