Den of Writers | StellaOlivetti | Activity https://www.denofwriters.com/members/stellaolivetti/activity/ Activity feed for StellaOlivetti. Wed, 10 Jun 2026 07:11:20 +0000 https://buddypress.org/?v= en-GB 30 hourly 2 8f0c5c62462736c03d87ed8b6179a86b StellaOlivetti replied to the topic Red (short story - 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/red-short-story-2600-words/#post-2648 Mon, 29 Oct 2018 13:33:30 +0000 Dear Elle

I liked it. I did find myself thinking of that Angela Carter story/film when I was reading the first version so I think there must have been enough subliminal wolf references there. The bit where she ate his fear genuinely creeped me out a bit! A few tiny things – is this for a competition, or a magazine? which might be worth…[Read more]

]]> 0 269b4696fe3d8540e127cad1dace537b StellaOlivetti replied to the topic Violence in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/violence/page/2/#post-2149 Sun, 07 Oct 2018 09:44:23 +0000 Richard, that was good/awful. Works very well as it’s Rosalind’s pov so the abandonment of grammar, punctuation etc makes perfect sense. I think upthread examples of where violence is done well was requested: to my mind, one of the best (and it’s really hideous) egs of a violent scene is the torture scene in Day of the Jackal. But as far as I…[Read more]

]]> 0 c10d29449deb215bd7f70cc900650a86 StellaOlivetti replied to the topic My failure in the forum Podium https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/my-failure/page/2/#post-1842 Wed, 26 Sep 2018 18:06:13 +0000 Me too

]]> 0 eea69728ecaabab99c68a87627bb64ab StellaOlivetti replied to the topic My failure in the forum Podium https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/my-failure/page/2/#post-1837 Wed, 26 Sep 2018 17:08:54 +0000 I will look at the two comps you mention. Bath, that’s interesting; I am dithering about entering the children’s competition, I think the end date is December. It’s 25 quid though which is a lot. I rationalise it to myself by reminding myself I don’t smoke. And yes, celebs, although I was really thinking of a famous comedian who’s started…[Read more]

]]> 0 15a4a4aa09fbad4860f9ac04ff02516d StellaOlivetti replied to the topic My failure in the forum Podium https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/my-failure/#post-1827 Wed, 26 Sep 2018 11:22:29 +0000 I am not sure what I feel about this. On the one hand, Alan, I don’t think you should term not getting long listed in four novel competitions a failure. (Actually I am impressed you managed to find four to enter – I never can find any that seem suitable.) We just don’t know enough about what the judges are looking for. And trying to second…[Read more]

]]> 0 bd90f795e55297e73a89b8f57747ec14 StellaOlivetti replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/memories/page/2/#post-1742 Mon, 24 Sep 2018 13:30:22 +0000 Yay! Well done, John. I did really find this horrible (in a good way). The only thing that jumped out at me (in a bad way) was the use of “seductive” to describe her smile, but that had gone anyway by the second edit.

Stella

]]> 0 5396199a8b86c488e7d660c24dad0e0b StellaOlivetti replied to the topic First chapter - Spider's path in the forum Critiques https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/first-chapter-spiders-path/#post-1740 Mon, 24 Sep 2018 12:45:59 +0000 I would definitely read on, since that’s what you asked, and I really enjoyed the contrast between the first and second sections. The tense change helps to separate the two, so it isn’t confusing. And I don’t hate prologues! The first bit, the more dreamlike, atmospheric section in the woods, would work as a prologue in my opinion. Of course,…[Read more]

]]> 0 f15b3e6cb2c5c679004a842d09c572d5 StellaOlivetti replied to the topic As an opening... in the forum Critiques https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/as-an-opening/page/2/#post-1488 Mon, 17 Sep 2018 19:45:05 +0000 Yes, well, exactly. There’s only seven plots in fiction, I seem to recall being told, and as you say, it’s all down to individual writing. So I wouldn’t worry too much.

Stella

It was Frank Carson I think!

]]> 0 b7602ae8ea239024130e6f67f4f8c235 StellaOlivetti replied to the topic As an opening... in the forum Critiques https://www.denofwriters.com/forums/topic/as-an-opening/page/2/#post-1474 Mon, 17 Sep 2018 16:49:15 +0000 It’s very visual, which I like. I also like your almost-informal style of writing, which should work for your target readership, which I’m assuming is younger teens/children? I vastly preferred your original opening sentence, for what it’s worth, it scanned better for me and ended with the interesting word illuminiorb, which makes you want to…[Read more]

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