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Athelstone replied to the topic August 2024 monthly competition in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 7 months ago
Another great competition. Thanks so much Libby. Congratulations to all, especially Sandra. Very well deserved.
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Athelstone replied to the topic August 2024 monthly competition in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 7 months ago
I had been thinking of writing a piece about the regular assembly of early morning imbibers near the local pier. My idea was to call it The Breakfast Club, but in deference to the competition it is as requested. Note that the language at these events is often rough. I have tamed it a bit but there may be a trace…
Shall I compare thee to a…[Read more]
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Athelstone posted an update 1 year, 8 months ago
I’d be grateful for some thoughts. I read a section from my WIP at a writers’ meeting and somebody commented on the name I chose for a character aged around 40. I named the character Carol. She said that this seemed rather an odd name for somebody of that age and that if you see “Carol” you immediately assume somebody older. This hadn’t occurred…[Read more]
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As far as I’m concerned the answers to your questions are ‘No’ and ‘No.’ I had a similar experiance about ten years ago when my daughter suggested that Angela was an unlikely name for a twenty-year-old, but the character had been with me in some shape or form for years and I couldn’t imagine her being anything else, so i stuck with it. And lo and…[Read more]
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I’ve realised for a while that I’ll need to change the name of one character. I introduced her simply for a physical look and mannerisms that I could understand and write about with some realism. But the name belongs to a real person and I’m not the only one who knows her. So…
But the other name? Is my critic opinionated? I couldn’t possibly…[Read more]
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I don’t remember anyone called Carol in the 80s and my younger sister did not have any friends called Carol that I know of. However, I do not associate the name with any particular generation in the way that I would, say, Mabel or Enid or Hilda.
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I knew a couple of Carols at work, but I think they were both probably born in the 60s. I also know a Carol (as I said up there) who’s in her early 40s now, so would be around the age of my character. I suspect that the person who was so definite on associating the name with an era was extra sensitive to it because she was a Carol herself. I’ve…[Read more]
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I’m late to the conversation but I think it’s fine to have a character with an out-of-era name. The only problem I could see with a story is if all the names were old-fashioned or unusual in some way without the author giving any explanation.
Seeing Carol and Angela now, I’m struck how pretty these names are. When they were in commoner currency I…[Read more]-
As a matter of interest (or not…) my character isn’t usually referred to as Angela. It’s part of an authorial joke. I gave her that name so that she could have the nickname Jelly, with the excuse that that was how she said her name when she was learning to talk and it stuck. The girl is a head-turner, and ‘jellyroll’ (as in Jellyroll Morton,…[Read more]
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I’d better not describe the original Teabreak to you as that might break something. Personally I can’t see anything wrong with Carol for the 80s, although I might add an “e” to the end (Carole). I’d go with what you’re comfortable writing with – you can always do a global change when finished if you really want. In other news I know at least one…[Read more]
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Well, thanks for the replies. She stays as Carol, with a suitable comment or two to settle her age. I’ve given this some more thought. In the novel her age is quite clear anyway because this and her appearance are described before Teabreak gets to know her. That’s one of the possible disadvantages of offering critique (especially “definitive”…[Read more]
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Jelly Roll Blues
A century old this year
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Athelstone replied to the topic Richard's Literary Byways: Fragment 31, by Sappho in the forum Blogs 1 year, 8 months ago
Great blog, Richard. Sadly I have very little internet right now. Will get back asap. Also, yikes! One of the updates has broken my menus (at least in mobile mode).
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Seagreen replied to the topic August 2024 monthly competition in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 8 months ago
Not sure it meets the brief and it’s a bit on the short side, but it’s where the fancy took me, so…
Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?
Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day? Nay. Thrice nay, unless that day be cold and dreich.
Then shall I liken thee to the first rose of summer? Nay, again, save that bloom be not perfect and proud but…[Read more]
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Athelstone posted an update 1 year, 8 months ago
Apologies to anybody who had a problem logging in to the Den in the last couple of days. Our hosting company jumped the gun (by a day or so) and turned off SSL (Secure Socket Layer which provides us with some of our site security) prior to the bill falling due.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly Competition July 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 8 months ago
Well done Libby! And well done to Sandra, too. Made me smile!
I didn’t read the other entries until after I’d posted mine, but I have to say 1) I was struck by the way we all had some common themes 2) I thought at once that Libby’s piece was a bit special.
Thanks for the competition, Terrie.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly Competition July 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 8 months ago
Don’t ever cross a crocodile.
Back when Chubby was chubby and not six inches taller than me and good looking, his nan died, and he went to the funeral. Afterwards, we met up near his gaff and he was in a bit of a moody with me.
‘All your fault, Teabreak, you twat!’ he goes.
‘Woss that then,’ I say, and I offer him a Number 6 to make up f…[Read more]
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly comp – June 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 9 months ago
Thank you for the challenge, Libby. And very well done to Terrie for another powerful piece of story telling.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly comp – June 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 9 months ago
Energy and shame
Understanding is a difficult word sometimes. We say, ‘I understand her,’ meaning that we know her reasons for doing something or other. It was as expected. Electricity feels rather different. Do I understand it? I mean, what is it? I was taught a load of rubbish at school about the movement of charged electrons. That isn’t elect…[Read more]
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly Competition – May 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 10 months ago
Thanks for the comp, Ath! Another opportunity to stretch myself ☺️
And congratulations to Libby for winning, and the rest of us for giving it a go ????
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Athelstone posted an update 1 year, 10 months ago
Sorry for any oddities and issues with the site. I had a bumper crop of major updates to install and although I did my best to slip these in seemlessly, there are one or two niggles. In particular, Buddypress, which gives the site many of its social networking features had a complete rewrite. I did check all the prerequisites and tried it out on…[Read more]
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly Competition – May 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 10 months ago
Why do you always insist on making this difficult?
Terrie’s Plant Song is almost a poem to the language of flowers. Rich and ancient with a deadly heart. The melody, she writes, is intoxicating, and I can’t think of a better word for the whole piece. I said “anything floral” and it’s hard to imagine something more floral than this. A wonderfully…[Read more]
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly Competition – May 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 10 months ago
THE GATEKEEPER
They closed the Winter Gardens. Lack of funding or resources or some other bullshit excuse. Redundancy notices for the gardeners who’d been there for years, and redeployment to grass-cutting duties for the young apprentices who still didn’t know their aquilegia from their allium. They stored the tools in the old stable buil…[Read more]
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Athelstone started the topic Monthly Competition – May 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 11 months ago
April showers bring May flowers. they say. But when is a flower a flower and when is it a weed? Anything floral in less than 501 words.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly Comp April 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 11 months ago
Seagreen, thanks so much. A brilliant prompt for April. Thanks also to my co-authors. There were some great pieces of writing.
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Seagreen replied to the topic How I Cope With My Box of Bugs. in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 1 year, 11 months ago
I love to plan. That’s why nothing ever gets written.
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly Comp April 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 11 months ago
Honestly, I’m sorry this has taken me so long…
All the entries left me wishing I’d given you more words to play with since each of them teased with hidden depths.
Ath – so easy to read (as ever!) Engaging, apparently effortless writing, but so many questions! Who was this man? Where did he come from and where would he end up? More importan…[Read more]
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly Comp April 2024 in the forum Monthly Competition 1 year, 11 months ago
Sorry! I haven’t forgotten, just waiting for a break in the clouds.
If I don’t have time tonight, then results will definitely be posted tomorrow when I’m off.
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Athelstone replied to the topic How I Cope With My Box of Bugs. in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 1 year, 11 months ago
To be fare, sometimes I don’t know the ending – or the story.
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