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Tony Lyttle replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 7 years, 11 months ago
Oh – and it might be good if there was a veiled hint of what was to come, earlier on. I mean heavily veiled, so that its true meaning would only be realised after reading to the end. Just a thought.
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Tony Lyttle replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 7 years, 11 months ago
I thought this very well written, John; nicely constructed, with the flashback. I kept wanting to read on. The only suggestion I would make is in the ending. “He was my first” is good because you immediately think she means her first time with a man, but quickly we see that’s not what she meant – which gives away the ending too soon. Much as I…[Read more]
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