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Libby replied to the topic What if I'm a bad human being? in the forum Blogs 6 years, 2 months ago
An author’s hypocrisy, offensiveness, crassness or general liverish misanthropy doesn’t normally put me off reading them. It depends what the benefits might be. Good writing, insights I might otherwise not acquire, my own curiosity – all are reasons to go ahead. There are some blocks, and adding money to the Roald Dahl estate is one of them.…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic What if I'm a bad human being? in the forum Blogs 6 years, 2 months ago
There are also examples in art – Paul Gauguin, Picasso and Freud, for example, were not particularly nice folk, it seems.
If a writer’s work doesn’t reflect his obnoxious views, does that make it OK? Or if his views are expressed in a work of fiction and not an educational piece?
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
A good question though, John.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
No problem @Libby, it was a flippant remark on my part, not intended to be taken seriously.
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
Many thanks, @daedalus.
Having thought about it a bit more, I’m going to restrict entries to one per person.
Although lots of competitions allow multiple entries I think that as the Den monthly competitions are small, double entries would skew the chance of winning too much in a double entrant’s favour. If several people were likely to post two…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
Personally I think that would be fine, John. I can’t see anything in the rules against it. I don’t think you’d need a pseudonym either.
But before you go ahead I’ll check with a higher authority. @daedalus – over to you, please!
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
I have two pieces nearly done but I don’t now which of them to enter. Maybe I’ll enter both, one under a pseudonym. Would that be cheating?
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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
Thanks @KazG. Your thoughts on this are comforting. I was worried if I had to pull back and simplify more I might lose the voice, but I wanted to know if I needed to do a major edit on this aspect or not. I’ll stop worrying about it now.
But, as always, the feedback has been great at throwing up some other issues, so I shall get to work on Pix’s…[Read more]
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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
I had a sticky scene that wasn’t working Squidge, and after some time away from it I reread and thought D’oh, of course she wouldn’t react like that. She’d be angry. It’s funny how the characters become real people in our heads.
Thanks for the heads up about Kingstone. I shall go take a look.
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Squidge replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
It’s still possible to get in close, even using third person. It’s a bit of a knack, to get into your character’s head in this way – I often find myself rewriting complete paras when editing, because by the end of the book I’m so familiar with my character I can tell how they’re going to react, what they’re feeling or thinking. It’s a weird place…[Read more]
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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
I did a bit of googling and everybody says something different. Apparently in 2014 there were more first person than third, so I guess it just varies.
I shall attempt to find more subtle ways of placing my characters, as you suggested. Thanks for all the help. I’ll keep it all in mind as I go in for the next round of edits.
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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
That’s a really good point Sea. I took a look at my MG books and they’re all third person! Thanks for the Jess Butterworth one – I shall take a look. I’ll also try and do some investigating into first/third. (And possibly have a cry over my keyboard at the thought of rewriting into third. :D)
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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
Thanks @seagreen, this is all great. I’ll have a think about the save the cat moment and ramp up the fear a bit as a few people have mentioned that. I’ll weed out some of the description as well.
Re the being in the character’s head, and the explanations like ‘standing next to me’, I think you’ve cut to the heart of my question re YA vs MG…[Read more]
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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
Thanks @bella – it was fun to write.
Perfect @squidge, that’s great to know it’s about right. I was worrying it was a bit densely packed but maybe I just have to be careful of too heavy descriptions. I shall tweak as suggested.
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Squidge replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
Hi Kate, it’s pitched about right, I think.
I wondered about the amount of description initially – and where it just touches on backstory/info dump when your MC says she’s never been there before. Can you rework something along the lines of ‘In all my sneaking around, I’d never managed to see inside, and I wasn’t disappointed on this, my first…[Read more]
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Kate started the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 2 months ago
I’ve got a draft of what is meant to be an upper mid grade novel, but I have concerns I’ve written it in a too Young Adult style. I’m specifically looking for feedback from experienced MG writers on whether I need to adjust the language/structure, and how I might go about it.
All other comments also welcome.
Many thanks.(As usual the…[Read more]
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Kate posted an update 6 years, 2 months ago
Are there any mid grade writers on the Den that would be willing to take a look at the first chapter of my MG book? Someone suggested I was using a YA style that might not be appropriate and I can see what they mean. I’d like thoughts on language and structure relating to MG books before embarking on the next edit.
I’ll post it up in crit for…[Read more]-
Hi Kate,
Just noticed this. If you post it, I’m read it but not sure how much help I’ll be.-
*I’ll*
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Thanks @seagreen. I’ll post it up tomorrow.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
Well done Libby, excellent. Good job, Jane.
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
Thank you, @Janette !
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Libby started the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 2 months ago
One of the novels I enjoyed reading in 2019 was The First Day by Phil Harrison. For the February competition please write a piece which depicts or refers to the first day of something – anything you like.
It can be a complete story or the start of a longer one. Maximum 400 words but a shorter entry is fine.
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