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  • Squidge replied to the topic Titles in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 6 months ago

    I like the ‘Here Ends…’, but what to say is ending.

    …the Seven Years of Pain
    …the Seven Years of Separation.
    Why not something like Seven Years Apart or The seven years of separation. The End Begins Here…? Just playing now!

    I also wonder if some of the other themes are more relevant to the title? There are an awful lot of themes going…[Read more]

  • Daedalus replied to the topic Titles in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 6 months ago

    Interesting one. Titles can be hard. Sometimes a really perfect one will just present itself. Other times…

    I was looking, as I’m sure you have, at a thesaurus to see if it was possible to simply replace ‘abduction’. The best I could do was ‘Here Ends the Absence’, or possibly ‘Here Ends the Departure’ which I’m not sure really does it.

  • Bella replied to the topic Titles in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 6 months ago

    A few initial ideas – not sure if they are anything like suitable:

    She once was lost

    But now she’s found

    (Been playing Amazing Grace…)

    Re-filling the nest

    Stolen childhood

  • During the abduction, she believed her family had abandoned her. Now that she has returned, she doesn’t know whom to trust, or where her “real” home is. She clings to cousin Jess, she mistrusts the adults, in the end she turns on her cousin too (bit of an all-is-lost moment there, before the end).

  • Yes, abducted aged 8, now 15. She grew up enmeshed with her cousin – they were like twins in a fairy-tale. She is blonde, her cousin brunette. Otherwise, an unstable childhood; her biological dad is estranged. Brought up by her step-dad since aged 4, and has twin half-brothers (now aged 7).

  • Hi guys,

    Titles are important, right, and annoyingly, I haven’t yet found the right one for my novel (I mean, it’s only been 3 years).

    I know this will be really tricky for you guys, having not read the thing, but I wonder if you could help me at all to brainstorm ideas? I’ve outlined where I’m at below.

    The elevator pitch of the the novel…[Read more]

  • RichardB replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    One of those moments that tend to restore your faith in human nature. And yes, very moving.

  • Yes, Thea – that ‘never apologise, never explain’ – I read, many years ago, that to do so was a sign of immaturity, but it’s one I haven’t always managed (not so much about my writing, I’m glad to say).

  • Interesting article, Sandra. I agree that many people have a tendency to downplay their work, to lower the expectation of the reader / viewer, as a sort of safety mechanism. And, as Squidge said, there are those who take this to the extreme and are really fishing for compliments.

    You make a good point, Sandra re the story challenges being a good…[Read more]

  • Seagreen replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    Felt the pressure building up as I read and the dam burst at this line ‘Within twenty four hours enough people from Mousehole had volunteered to form a new crew…’Not a good look when you’re in the restaurant car park waiting for your sister.

    Seriously, there are no other group of people who earn this much of my respect.

  • RichardB replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    I can understand how this man feels, but I also remember that the coxswain turned away some of those who did make it to the lifeboat station. Who’s to say he might not have been one of them?

    If you want to experience the full admiration for the courage of those men, you need to watch that BBC film and listen to Russell Smith’s eyewitness account…[Read more]

  • Daedalus replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    Another possibility is that the waves were so big that in a trough the Solomon Brown literally hit the seabed. If I’m ever up Whitby way I’ll definitely see about a ride on their Watson lifeboat.

    There’s a decent collection of historic lifeboats at the dockyard at Chatham. I’ve a feeling they have a couple of Watson-type boats there but it seems…[Read more]

  • RichardB replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    The BBC documentary gives the false impression (without actually saying so) that the moment that transmission broke off was the end of the Solomon Browne. That makes for an emotional moment in the programme, but was not the case, since it was seen afterwards. For what it’s worth, I believe that it suffered another violent impact with the Union…[Read more]

  • Bella replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    Truly terrifying conditions. I am sorry it was such a sad end for so many people.

    Very well-told tale, Richard. Thank you.

  • Daedalus replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    Superb blog tinged with tragedy, and, as always told with clarity and sympathy. For all the improvements in hardware and technology, RNLI operations can still be phenomenally dangerous. Operating in those conditions, that close to shore… Reading the account reminded me of The Perfect Storm by Sebastian Junger (great book, but don’t bother with…[Read more]

  • Interesting. I think sometimes, ‘It’s not quite there yet’ can sound like an apology, when it’s actually the admittance of a mature (by which I mean you know yourself and your writing) author, who realises that something created in such a short space of time needs more work. I’ve done it myself!

    But of course it takes time to build that…[Read more]

  • John S Alty replied to the topic For Those in Peril… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 6 months ago

    Excellent, Richard.

  • The older I get the more disenchanted I become with my fellow humans. I look at the dishonesty, greed, hate and stupidity that seem to fill the news and I despair. One reason I live in a small village halfway up a South Welsh mountain is to get away from all the shit. But in the increasing misanthropy of my old age there is still one group of…[Read more]

  • Phillippa: that sounds a very good attitude to develop,thanks.

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