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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Hi L,
I think you could trim most of the paragraphs in the first half of the story, really. The Physics thing (tight pants) early on could go, you use this analogy later on anyway. Watching a film at the cinema, that paragraph could be less wordy I think.
And towards the end – “zipped her hoodie and pulled the hood over her head” etc. I know…[Read more] -
JaneShuff replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Still missing three quarters of the story….
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Daedalus replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Ah, yes. Planning. It’s going…um…
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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
That’s the most important bit done.
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Thank you for a very interesting read Daedalus. You have made me want to go and watch the film. I am
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I absolutely agree with you Raine about not every character progressing through their arc in synchrony and entirety but nevertheless needing some sort of arc. I have only recently realised that this gives the relationships between characters energy and life as they shift according to where they are in their ‘journey’. It is a powerful tool.
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Thanks Raine. I’ve seen the film numerous times over the years (the first being as a very small child) and have got different things from it each time. One reading would definitely be a clash between rival alpha males. And it’s definitely in the ‘high adventure’ tradition, but I do think there’s more to it than that. Not least as ultimatel…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
I think “Spotting an opening…” needs a new para. The lipstick thing is a little over complicated, I think you could shorten it without losing anything.
The “pills like skittles” analogy doesn’t work for me.
“Small-to-medium-time” seems a cop-out, he’s a small-time crook, I think.
“Anticipated to sit..” should be “anticipated sitting”.I’d take…[Read more]
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I was watching the film The Flight of the Phoenix earlier today, and this ‘arc’ kept occuring to me, so for the sake of curiosity I decided to have a look to see if it fit this structure, and if so, how. It’s a bit of an interesting case as it’s an ensemble piece with multiple ‘main’ characters, each with their own arc. I’ll consider it for the…[Read more]
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I too tend not too worry too much about the overall structure when I’m actually in the thick of writing a first draft but I have found that reading the various books about structure has helped me be aware of the broad sweeps of the shape of a story as I’m thinking it out.
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Debi Alper posted an update 7 years, 8 months ago
Someone on the current self-edit course has just posted this link about creating suspense and I thought I’d share it here: http://www.writersdigest.com/online-editor/6-secrets-to-creating-and-sustaining-suspense
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Yeah, I tend to consider matters of formal structure far more in the edit than in the initial draft
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Lots of interesting stuff here. I’ve never been much of a planner, and am inherently sceptical of the idea of story structure as something fixed and immutable for many of the reasons Libby raises. As structures go, however, I like this one more than most as it’s fixed to the inner life of the main character rather than something that risks being…[Read more]
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Athelstone replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I find this sort of structural analysis interesting – and useful because I’m convinced that there’s a kind of validity to it. So I’m really happy to steal the ideas and use them. What I’m not so sure of is whether something with a “universal” explanatory power – or even scope – is being described. And that goes for the stages of grief as well.…[Read more]
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Kate replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
This is great Raine. I’ve read a few structure books and I can see how they all reflect in this arc. It’s nice to have it in this concise summary. I’m going to print it out and pin it to the wall!
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John S Alty posted an update 7 years, 8 months ago
Market day in town so I’m off to see what treasures I can find at the book stall.
I’ve rediscovered the joy of real books now I’ve ditched my annoying Kindle.-
Nothing beats a good rummage through bookshops/book stalls, does it? But I confess I do love my kindle very, very muchly. 🙂
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Nothing can beat the smell of books.
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Magical, I agree, but then again Pebby’s pie shop in the village has a certain attraction, too.
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OOOOOh! Pieeees! I am rather partial to a pork pie!
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My problem is more with amazon than the kindle per se. I’m happy to read on an ipad, I just don’t want the intrusive presence of amazon.
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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Kaz – what’s your name on NaNoWriMo? I’m Athelstone.
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Athelstone posted an update 7 years, 8 months ago
Apologies to anybody receiving odd spam/phishing/troll messages at the moment. Hopefully an eviction is imminent.
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