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Athelstone posted an update 5 years, 3 months ago
Still February. Still time. Not a leap year. Be quick.
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Squidge replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
Oh – and contractions? Bunkum! If you have a distinctly voiced character, they will ‘think’ and describe in contractions just as much as they use them in dialogue. I’d have no luck with this editor cos I often write voice with contractions…makes it more real to me as the writer, and immerses the reader in the story, in my experience.
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Squidge replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
Is it worth having a look at how you’ve used ‘I’, Doug? If you’re using it frequently, then yes, definitely worth looking up psychic distance. There’s a big difference between ‘I sit at the table near the window. Outside, I see a man fighting to keep his brolly up in the wind and rain’, and ‘I sit at the table near the window and watch the man…[Read more]
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RichardB replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
Having written an entire novel in colloquial first person a la Catcher in the Rye, having made a conscious effort to break through my inhibitions about departing from Oxford (or Queen’s, or formal – call it what you will) English to do so, and having found the process liberating and rather fun, I’ll give a heartfelt ‘Hear, hear!’ to that. Okay,…[Read more]
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RichardB replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
Well bugger me. Apparently, if you just copy and paste a URL into here, without bothering with that ‘link’ button, it links automatically. You live and learn.
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RichardB replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
It occurs to me that one reason for over-use of ‘I’, or any other pronoun come to that, is filtering. This is another cause of the ‘frustrating distance’ Libby mentions, and Emma Darwin (Who else?) explains it far better than I could.
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RichardB replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
My immediate and visceral reaction to both criticisms was ‘Bollocks!’ If writing in first person, what other pronoun is there for you to use? How are you going to avoid the pronoun? If writing in third person, does the same criticism apply to ‘he, ‘she’ or ‘they?’ I suspect the real problem is not with the pronoun itself but with the style. As for…[Read more]
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Comments from an Editor in the forum Blogs 5 years, 3 months ago
Interesting. I would have said it is perfectly acceptable to use contractions such as I’m, He’d, don’t etc in narrative writing. In fact I think it’s fine to use anything you want provided it doesn’t obscure the meaning. It’s all down to what the voice and style require.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Good news on the lyric writing front in the forum Podium 5 years, 4 months ago
That is amazing news. Well done, indeed!
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Squidge replied to the topic Good news on the lyric writing front in the forum Podium 5 years, 4 months ago
Congratulations! Fab news!
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Good news on the lyric writing front in the forum Podium 5 years, 4 months ago
Wow! Congratulations! Where can we read it?
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Should be here:
https://www.songwritingcontest.co.uk/later-than-you-think.html-
Beautiful, John. I can hear it. Where do you go from here with it?
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Collaboration. Either someone wanting to produce this song, or one of my others, or wants me to write something to a specific melody. We’ll see! Elton John hasn’t called yet – must be busy.
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Daedalus posted an update 5 years, 4 months ago
Cutting a story down from 3800 to 2800… Got to 3200 and now every word removed feels like a fingernail
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Keep going, Daeds. And good luck!
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Thanks @libby! 209 to go
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Oh no, @daedalus, we’re not going to be haunted by all the babies murdered, are we? 😀
Seriously, good luck with that. If anyone can, you can.-
Thanks! It’s looking pretty sparse, I can tell you
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59 for me.
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And I just happen to be reading a book about writing titled “Murder Your Darlings.” 🙂
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Sounds like fate to me. Keep slaying 🙂
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I have allowed myself one darling to remain. The rest have been butchered
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I started out at 900 words over, Daedalus, but persevered and think my cut down version is stronger. Funny how that can happen. Good luck with losing those final few hundred words.
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All of you! Save those precious babes and enter them in the Monthy Comp!
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Often that is the case, but in this case the original version was fairly tight, and there was no real way to lose length other than salami slicing. Ah well
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Athelstone started the topic Monthly comp – February 2021 in the forum Monthly Competition 5 years, 4 months ago
Can’t believe it’s February already. To quote Don McLean, February made me shiver. Cold, love, anger, heat, fear, excitement, illness, happiness – 400 words maximum on absolutely anything that caused a shiver one February.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2021 in the forum Monthly Competition 5 years, 4 months ago
A small field but some fab entries and I’m very happy to be picked!
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Squidge posted an update 5 years, 4 months ago
My Bump story’s up at last. Been pondering it for weeks, with no real ideas coming together, then it all came through in a rush this weekend. Phew.
(Loved reading the other stories that’ve been posted. I never start on them til I’ve posted my own…)
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Athelstone posted an update 5 years, 4 months ago
A MESSAGE FOR ALL “THINGS THAT GO BUMP” ESSAYERS. There is an update in the group’s activity stream.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2021 in the forum Monthly Competition 5 years, 4 months ago
Occasional rough language
Prat’s Key Wood
Prat’s Key Wood was as old as the hills. No, really.
Well, seeing as the hills are billions of years old and forged in the countless aeons before organic life, that’s a stretch. But, I mean 1) it was ancient to the max and 2) it took Jacko and a team of ten, and a bulldozer, and chainsaws, just one…[Read more]
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Athelstone posted an update 5 years, 4 months ago
Is it just me, or is the commercially produced garlic from supermarkets and greengrocers feeble old shite compared to the stuff I cooked with a few years back? I’ll swear it used to have some bite and tang to it, but these days I could stick whole bulbs in and hardly taste it. Going to try growing a few different types.
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No it’s not just you! Supermarket garlic tastes quite bland compared to the stuff I’ve cooked with while self-catering in France – though our local farm shop sometimes has decent bulbs.
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Definitely true. The garlic in the box I get from the organic farmer in the next village is ten times tastier than supermarket stuff.
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I agree. It has gone the way of so many other foods, so bland when mass produced. My France holiday (a distant memory) showed just how much.
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One of the first and most obvious changes is that after preparing a meal with garlic I’d have to scrub away at my hands for a good ten minutes and they’d still be poor company next day. These days a quick rinse is all that’s needed.
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JaneShuff posted an update 5 years, 5 months ago
Posting this on the off chance someone can help. I’m planning my next book, part of which will be set in a camp for refugees and immigrants – very similar to the camp on Lesbos in Greece. I need to do some research into the conditions in the Greek camps and how they operates and also get some sense of the refugees’ different stories. I’ve found an…[Read more]
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