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RichardB posted an update 7 years, 8 months ago
Just about to take murdering darlings to a new level. There’s this paragraph I posted for one of the exercises in the S-E course. Debi was impressed, and helped me make it even better. And now it’s got to go. The whole para. (Sobs.)
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Jules replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
I’m pretty sure I’ll get the words down. But right now I have only the vaguest plan and I can’t think of even a working title.
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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Well, I’m feeling a tad more apprehensive than in previous years. There’s a certain investment in succeeding this time – for me. Well, succeeding in writing the requisite number of words anyway. My record is one complete children’s story, one block of 50K words that I eventually deleted, two failures.
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I often think “getting” story structure is like one of those damn magic eye puzzles. All these people around you are like “oh yeah! It’s dolphins!!” while you’re staring at it like, “whaaa?”
And then, you glimpse it (maybe in a CM Taylor workshop), but then it’s gone again. You glimpse it, it disappears, you glimpse it, you go…[Read more]
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Daedalus started the topic When to start querying (submitting) your novel in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 8 months ago
An interesting blogpost discussing at what point your novel might be ready to send to agents etc. Also useful on subbing short stories
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Hi L,
I think you could trim most of the paragraphs in the first half of the story, really. The Physics thing (tight pants) early on could go, you use this analogy later on anyway. Watching a film at the cinema, that paragraph could be less wordy I think.
And towards the end – “zipped her hoodie and pulled the hood over her head” etc. I know…[Read more] -
Daedalus replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Ah, yes. Planning. It’s going…um…
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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
That’s the most important bit done.
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Thanks Raine. I’ve seen the film numerous times over the years (the first being as a very small child) and have got different things from it each time. One reading would definitely be a clash between rival alpha males. And it’s definitely in the ‘high adventure’ tradition, but I do think there’s more to it than that. Not least as ultimatel…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
I think “Spotting an opening…” needs a new para. The lipstick thing is a little over complicated, I think you could shorten it without losing anything.
The “pills like skittles” analogy doesn’t work for me.
“Small-to-medium-time” seems a cop-out, he’s a small-time crook, I think.
“Anticipated to sit..” should be “anticipated sitting”.I’d take…[Read more]
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I was watching the film The Flight of the Phoenix earlier today, and this ‘arc’ kept occuring to me, so for the sake of curiosity I decided to have a look to see if it fit this structure, and if so, how. It’s a bit of an interesting case as it’s an ensemble piece with multiple ‘main’ characters, each with their own arc. I’ll consider it for the…[Read more]
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
@janeshuff, that’s a great way of putting it. Yes, “the broad sweeps” and then refining in the edits.
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Yeah, I tend to consider matters of formal structure far more in the edit than in the initial draft
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Lots of interesting stuff here. I’ve never been much of a planner, and am inherently sceptical of the idea of story structure as something fixed and immutable for many of the reasons Libby raises. As structures go, however, I like this one more than most as it’s fixed to the inner life of the main character rather than something that risks being…[Read more]
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Sorry – I didn’t actually mean that story structure depicts mental illnesses.
More that psychologists have many different models to describe particular MH conditions. For example, for depression we have the CBT model, the psychoanalytic model, the interpersonal model, the biological model etc. etc. Each model is trying to describe and explain…[Read more]
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RichardB replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I feel much the same way, Squidge. I never have been able to get on with charts, graphs, grids or any other kind of science-ish analysis. I’m not knocking it for those who find it useful, but my eyes start to glaze over when faced with such stuff, and it seems to place a barrier between me and my creativity (if any). I suppose I might conceivably…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I remember doing these sessions at York…it all seemed to make perfect sense when CMT was explaining it, but I can’t put it into practise. I don’t think I have the kind of logical and structural mind that can break a story down into these kind of segments. Which is annoying, because I know it’s all good stuff and very useful – I just can’t apply…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Very nice… There were a couple of points only that tripped me up in the reading:
‘Tasha and she nicked the lipstick’. Didn’t sound right. I wondered about ‘She’d nicked the lipstick when she was with Tasha’, but wasn’t sure how that’d affect your word count.
‘The salty scent of sweaty skin trapped in every pore’. I read this first as the sweaty…[Read more] -
Athelstone replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I find this sort of structural analysis interesting – and useful because I’m convinced that there’s a kind of validity to it. So I’m really happy to steal the ideas and use them. What I’m not so sure of is whether something with a “universal” explanatory power – or even scope – is being described. And that goes for the stages of grief as well.…[Read more]
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You have my sympathies. But keep the cut lines somewhere, Richard. You never know when a version of them may turn out to be useful in another piece.
In the meantime, here’s a hanky 🙂