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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
AAARRRGGHHH! (as it used to say in my comics)
Up with the count. Resisted the temptation to count the 2500 “seed” words that I had before the start. I think I’ll have a couple of hundred more to do before I give up tonight. Remarkable difference in the way I feel about making myself write at this pace which, honestly, isn’t that high a word…[Read more]
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
@kazg, thanks so much for that link.
And you’ve expressed above so beautifully my exact thoughts on story structure – including the necessity of balancing all our technical knowledge with room for the subconscious to speak.
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly competition – Nov 2018 in the forum Monthly Competition 7 years, 8 months ago
I’m not sure what fascinates me more – the list of items you came up with or the fact you came up with them when you were caught by surprise…🤔
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly comp – October 2018 in the forum Monthly Competition 7 years, 8 months ago
Thank you all for taking the time to post an entry, especially Sandra, who kicked things off (phew!), but later withdrew by reason of unavailability to set the next comp should she win.
Anyway, as most of you know, I’m rubbish at any kind of feedback so I’ll keep this short.
Sandra – strong voice. And some perfect turns of phrase – ‘Like a…[Read more]
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Xander Michael replied to the topic Monthly comp – October 2018 in the forum Monthly Competition 7 years, 8 months ago
“Let’s go. Everyone’s gone!”
“Not yet, there’s still one coat left.” I only been working in the cloak room for less than a month, but I take it seriously. It’s my first job after my stint in jail. Nothin’ bad, just got me some sticky fingers is all. Then of all the jobs to land after that, I gets a job takin’ care of other people’s belongings…[Read more]
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Jules replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
I’m pretty sure I’ll get the words down. But right now I have only the vaguest plan and I can’t think of even a working title.
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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Well, I’m feeling a tad more apprehensive than in previous years. There’s a certain investment in succeeding this time – for me. Well, succeeding in writing the requisite number of words anyway. My record is one complete children’s story, one block of 50K words that I eventually deleted, two failures.
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I often think “getting” story structure is like one of those damn magic eye puzzles. All these people around you are like “oh yeah! It’s dolphins!!” while you’re staring at it like, “whaaa?”
And then, you glimpse it (maybe in a CM Taylor workshop), but then it’s gone again. You glimpse it, it disappears, you glimpse it, you go…[Read more]
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Hilary replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Very interesting blog. I, too, have listened, enthralled, to Craig’s lectures on this, and have read an enormous amount of stuff about structure. I’m struggling rather with it now, at the almost-finished-the-second-draft-of-my-novel-stage. I don’t know if my struggle is because I’ve read too many different models/descriptions and have become…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Hi L,
I think you could trim most of the paragraphs in the first half of the story, really. The Physics thing (tight pants) early on could go, you use this analogy later on anyway. Watching a film at the cinema, that paragraph could be less wordy I think.
And towards the end – “zipped her hoodie and pulled the hood over her head” etc. I know…[Read more] -
Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
That’s the most important bit done.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
I think “Spotting an opening…” needs a new para. The lipstick thing is a little over complicated, I think you could shorten it without losing anything.
The “pills like skittles” analogy doesn’t work for me.
“Small-to-medium-time” seems a cop-out, he’s a small-time crook, I think.
“Anticipated to sit..” should be “anticipated sitting”.I’d take…[Read more]
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
@janeshuff, that’s a great way of putting it. Yes, “the broad sweeps” and then refining in the edits.
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Sorry – I didn’t actually mean that story structure depicts mental illnesses.
More that psychologists have many different models to describe particular MH conditions. For example, for depression we have the CBT model, the psychoanalytic model, the interpersonal model, the biological model etc. etc. Each model is trying to describe and explain…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I remember doing these sessions at York…it all seemed to make perfect sense when CMT was explaining it, but I can’t put it into practise. I don’t think I have the kind of logical and structural mind that can break a story down into these kind of segments. Which is annoying, because I know it’s all good stuff and very useful – I just can’t apply…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Very nice… There were a couple of points only that tripped me up in the reading:
‘Tasha and she nicked the lipstick’. Didn’t sound right. I wondered about ‘She’d nicked the lipstick when she was with Tasha’, but wasn’t sure how that’d affect your word count.
‘The salty scent of sweaty skin trapped in every pore’. I read this first as the sweaty…[Read more] -
Athelstone replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I find this sort of structural analysis interesting – and useful because I’m convinced that there’s a kind of validity to it. So I’m really happy to steal the ideas and use them. What I’m not so sure of is whether something with a “universal” explanatory power – or even scope – is being described. And that goes for the stages of grief as well.…[Read more]
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
That’s great, @raine, and so nicely explained.
I find so many similarities between the many varied “models” of story structure, and the many evolving models we use in psychiatry to diagnose and treat mental health conditions.
Mental health conditions (the fairly predictable ways in which the human brain breaks down) have a sort of inherent…[Read more]
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John S Alty posted an update 7 years, 8 months ago
Market day in town so I’m off to see what treasures I can find at the book stall.
I’ve rediscovered the joy of real books now I’ve ditched my annoying Kindle.-
Nothing beats a good rummage through bookshops/book stalls, does it? But I confess I do love my kindle very, very muchly. 🙂
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Nothing can beat the smell of books.
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Magical, I agree, but then again Pebby’s pie shop in the village has a certain attraction, too.
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OOOOOh! Pieeees! I am rather partial to a pork pie!
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My problem is more with amazon than the kindle per se. I’m happy to read on an ipad, I just don’t want the intrusive presence of amazon.
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Ooh, what’s this? More detail please! Post in ‘Podium’?
Thanks.