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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 7 months ago
Thanks @bella – it was fun to write.
Perfect @squidge, that’s great to know it’s about right. I was worrying it was a bit densely packed but maybe I just have to be careful of too heavy descriptions. I shall tweak as suggested.
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Kate started the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 7 months ago
I’ve got a draft of what is meant to be an upper mid grade novel, but I have concerns I’ve written it in a too Young Adult style. I’m specifically looking for feedback from experienced MG writers on whether I need to adjust the language/structure, and how I might go about it.
All other comments also welcome.
Many thanks.(As usual the…[Read more]
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Kate posted an update 6 years, 7 months ago
Are there any mid grade writers on the Den that would be willing to take a look at the first chapter of my MG book? Someone suggested I was using a YA style that might not be appropriate and I can see what they mean. I’d like thoughts on language and structure relating to MG books before embarking on the next edit.
I’ll post it up in crit for…[Read more]-
Hi Kate,
Just noticed this. If you post it, I’m read it but not sure how much help I’ll be.-
*I’ll*
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Thanks @seagreen. I’ll post it up tomorrow.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
I spent a day in Seville. I recommend a) don’t drive; it’s considerably more insane than Paris and that’s bad enough b) wear a surgical mask or take oxygen; the air reminded me of London circa 1973 only much, much, worse c) we liked the Plaza de España and the Cathedral, but honestly there’s so much. We were almost persuaded to visit the site of…[Read more]
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Thank Ath. Going to the cathedral and the palaces tomorrow and spent the day wandering around including seeing students doing Flamenco at Plaza Espana. Fabulous. It is all fabulous for folks like us who live in a little breton coastal backwater although you are right about the air. Did you see my post last week about failing to get enouh done in…[Read more]
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Ps posting this at the airport. Has anyone been to Seville? Any recommendations as to things to do?
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Just noticed that I forgot to take the numbers off my comments. They mean nothing. I got my OH to print the stories off with nothing to identify them and number them so I would judge them blind. Except for Ath who posted so late he missed the process.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Well done Libby, excellent. Good job, Jane.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Great entry, Libby and a very well deserved win.
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Thank you everyone. And sorry for the delay. We’re away for a few days from tomorrow and I had quite a few things that had to be done before we went.
A cracking bunch of entries. I hope you enjoyed writing these as much as I enjoyed reading them. As usual I was struck by the many different ways they all responded to the theme.
1) @johnalty. I…[Read more]
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Thank you all! I am looking forward to readying them. I am out most of today so results will be posted this evening.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
‘You don’t have a future, not really,’ said Gregor. He shifted his bones on the stone floor making his chains rattle.
‘Ah,’ said the philosopher, at length, ‘you’re one of those Zenonians. A Stoic I suppose. You imagine that because we can never sufficiently divide the instant we call the present, then it must be an illusion, as is the future. A…[Read more]
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John S Alty posted an update 6 years, 7 months ago
The activity thread is rather strange since the DIY MA programme got underway – it’s like overhearing half a conversation. Intriguing.
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Unfortunately, WordPress with its plugins that give us groups etc. has a fair few bugs. For some unknown reason, the DIY MA group, in spite of being set as private, spills its conversations if you select Activity whether you’re a member or not.
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You should join us, John. It’s very relaxed!
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Yeah, soz about that. I and the admins have both (all) tried to sort it and it just isn’t playing. Frustrating, but if it lures you into joining in, then maybe that’s a win!
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Kate replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise "I Don't Remember" – KazG in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 7 months agoThis is so clever, Kaz. And I didn’t expect it to go in that direction either. Wow. Excellent stuff.
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise "I Don't Remember" – KazG in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 7 months agoOw Wow Kaz. That is fantastic. Funnily enough I have just come to a bit in my WIP that made me think of this exercise. I might have a go at it too!
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Daedalus replied to the topic New historical fiction novella in the forum Podium 6 years, 7 months ago
Thanks @RichardB 🙂
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Daedalus replied to the topic New historical fiction novella in the forum Podium 6 years, 7 months ago
I forgot to mention that book 2 of my ‘Fortress of Malta’ series of WW2 novellas was out, but it’s now on 99p promotion on Kindle, so a good time to point it out https://www.amazon.co.uk/Bastion-Fortress-Malta-Book-2-ebook/dp/B07Y5MDLWZ/
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John S Alty replied to the topic Dipping my toe back in in the forum Blogs 6 years, 7 months ago
Hi @skylark, good to see you’re back.
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 7 months ago
Just a quick reminder that you have until Friday midnight to get your entries for this month’s competition (around 400 words on the theme of The Future interpreted in any way you wish). I know some of you, like me, are fighting to finish your entries for the Winter Competition but can I tempt those of you who are sitting back and basking in the…[Read more]
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Daedalus replied to the topic Brexit dismay in the forum Coffee Shop 6 years, 7 months ago
@Raine I like that quote (it reminds me of the fake George Orwell one). Whether it helps or not is a different question, but as Joseph Conrad pointed out, ‘action is consolatory’.
@skylark I’ve been following your family’s journey when you’ve posted on Facebook and I can’t begin to express my admiration. The strength conferred by love is…[Read more]
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Daedalus replied to the topic Brexit dismay in the forum Coffee Shop 6 years, 7 months ago
@libby my take on it has always been that the laxative story is apocryphal. I think you’d have to ingest an awful lot of the stuff to have any effect, and the diffusion of the oil in the exhaust would make that difficult. One version I heard was that there were all sorts of things likely to have a laxative effect on pilots of that era – alcohol…[Read more]
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