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Squidge replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 3 months ago
Hi Kate, it’s pitched about right, I think.
I wondered about the amount of description initially – and where it just touches on backstory/info dump when your MC says she’s never been there before. Can you rework something along the lines of ‘In all my sneaking around, I’d never managed to see inside, and I wasn’t disappointed on this, my first…[Read more]
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Bella replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 3 months ago
I have no experience of writing MG, and it is a loooooong time since I was aged between 8 and 12 (that’s the MG target, right?) but I would say you are slap bang on the money. I’d certainly have gone for this at that age. It’s great fun.
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Bella replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise “I don’t remember” – Hilary in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoOh, this packs a punch. The add-on sentences say so much, and the voice is great.
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Kate started the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 3 months ago
I’ve got a draft of what is meant to be an upper mid grade novel, but I have concerns I’ve written it in a too Young Adult style. I’m specifically looking for feedback from experienced MG writers on whether I need to adjust the language/structure, and how I might go about it.
All other comments also welcome.
Many thanks.(As usual the…[Read more]
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KazG replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise “I don’t remember” – Hilary in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoWow, this is so rich @hilary. So much there, so many hints and glimpses and twinges of pain and longing and sadness. There’s a sort of yearning behind of these lines that breaks my heart a bit. Such powerful fragments.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 3: Writing Exercise, Raine. in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoAmazing piece, Raine. A wonderful example of writing a character through the eyes of another one. Very sad.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 3 writing exercise "I don't remember", Sandra in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoI wonder if he will end up getting away with the misbehaviour? Interesting piece.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 3: Writing Exercise, Bella in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoGreat contrast between the two letters, Bella. And yes – what is buried within – that’s the most interesting bit. Very clever.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise "I Don't Remember" – KazG in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoAn amazing piece of writing, Kaz. Very powerful. Strong imagery. Brilliant.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise “I don’t remember” – Hilary in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoOh, except the Dad drawing. That’s from a character in one of my stories.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise “I don’t remember” – Hilary in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoI enjoyed doing this. I didn’t really think about the Burroway while I was writing – it was more a free-writing exercise. And it’s not in the voice of any character I’m already writing. Just came out of nowhere.
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Hilary started the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise “I don’t remember” – Hilary in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoI don’t remember when my Dad stopped drawing. Or why.
I don’t remember my Mum ever being soft.
I don’t remember ever laughing while I was eating, or spluttering bits of cake. I saw other people do it though.
I don’t remember the taste of the wine. It didn’t really have a taste. But I remember it was too warm.
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Hilary replied to the topic Craft Seminar Class 3: Character 2 – Inner Lives in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoLiking this: All good characters are created round, but some are created rounder than others.
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Hilary replied to the topic Class 2 Writing Exercise Jane in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 3 months agoHello @JaneShuff
VERY late to this, but I’m trying to do a bit of a catch up with class 2 before I get on to class 3. I LOVED meeting Dipsy in the initial passage and then reading your questionnaire about her. I agree about not needing to answer al the questions, but they are great prompts.
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Kate posted an update 6 years, 3 months ago
Are there any mid grade writers on the Den that would be willing to take a look at the first chapter of my MG book? Someone suggested I was using a YA style that might not be appropriate and I can see what they mean. I’d like thoughts on language and structure relating to MG books before embarking on the next edit.
I’ll post it up in crit for…[Read more]-
Hi Kate,
Just noticed this. If you post it, I’m read it but not sure how much help I’ll be.-
*I’ll*
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Thanks @seagreen. I’ll post it up tomorrow.
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Athelstone replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 3 months ago
I spent a day in Seville. I recommend a) don’t drive; it’s considerably more insane than Paris and that’s bad enough b) wear a surgical mask or take oxygen; the air reminded me of London circa 1973 only much, much, worse c) we liked the Plaza de España and the Cathedral, but honestly there’s so much. We were almost persuaded to visit the site of…[Read more]
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Thank Ath. Going to the cathedral and the palaces tomorrow and spent the day wandering around including seeing students doing Flamenco at Plaza Espana. Fabulous. It is all fabulous for folks like us who live in a little breton coastal backwater although you are right about the air. Did you see my post last week about failing to get enouh done in…[Read more]
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 3 months ago
Ps posting this at the airport. Has anyone been to Seville? Any recommendations as to things to do?
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 3 months ago
Just noticed that I forgot to take the numbers off my comments. They mean nothing. I got my OH to print the stories off with nothing to identify them and number them so I would judge them blind. Except for Ath who posted so late he missed the process.
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Raine replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 3 months ago
Ooh congrats @libby on a very deserving perfectly formed story! 😊 And thank you @janeshuff for a challenge that got me away from editing/fretting! X
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Seagreen replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 3 months ago
Congratulations, Libby! 🙂
And thanks, Jane, for kick-starting my writing year x - Load More
