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MCave replied to the topic Critique requested for Middle Grade Fantasy Chapter in the forum Critiques 4 years ago
Critique requested, if anyone has time. 🙂
This chapter has a few tricky things going on:
1. A foreign language, which Elspeth begins to understand, and ultimately will speak. I show this in later chapters by changing the font when she speaks the Shejara language, so its clear that certain characters can or can’t understand her. I want to give…[Read more] -
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MCave replied to the topic Critique requested for Middle Grade Fantasy Chapter in the forum Critiques 4 years ago
Thank you! So helpful! xx
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MCave started the topic Critique requested for Middle Grade Fantasy Chapter in the forum Critiques 4 years ago
( I hope it works. It seems to have lost some formatting as I pasted it in here)
This is a middle chapter so a bit of background context:
Elspeth’s dad disappeared ten years ago, but she’s certain he’s still alive because he sends her dreams. Mum won’t talk about Dad. It’s too painful. So Elspeth knows very little about him, except the bits…[Read more]-
I’ve been trying to post my crit but the forum really isn’t happy with me and wont let me do it! Maybe the posts are too long?
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MCave posted a new activity comment 4 years ago
Thanks @katemachon. I’d be happy to. I just didn’t want to presume people had time, as I’m new! How do people usually do it? A chapter? Or a synopsis and a chapter?
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Maybe post them separately for focused feedback. I’ll look forward to reading.
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MCave posted an update 4 years ago
Hello! I’m new here. I’ve been having a nose around and trying get to know this place. I write middle grade fantasy, and would be quite happy to read and critique work for others, but I couldn’t tell from the many of the posts what’s live for critique at the moment. Please point me in the right direction. Thanks and nice to meet you!
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Hi MCave – I’m working on a middle grade fantasy myself at the moment, so hellooo! I don’t think there’s anything current in the crit section, but maybe you’d like to share something.
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Thanks @katemachon. I’d be happy to. I just didn’t want to presume people had time, as I’m new! How do people usually do it? A chapter? Or a synopsis and a chapter?
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Maybe post them separately for focused feedback. I’ll look forward to reading.
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Hullo!! Glad you found your way into the Den. Look forward to seeing the story develop x
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