Whisks

Brilliant news Janette – definitely one for the Podium. And make sure you put a note there when the story’s published 🙂

Yay for the recording!!! Hope we can access it somehow when it goes up. *crosses fingers*

And no excuses necessary for shouting, WE ARE ALL SO PROUD OF HER!!!!!

Ding ding ding – nope, still true! Brilliant news, Janette. Well done. And yes, it sounds very unusual.

You’re welcome, Bren. Lovely to see so many familiar names, indeed

Good luck for when you sub! Xx

Yes, definetly more oblique, great. I wonder if you might change the ‘I hate sharing you’ lime (which makes Ashley sounds possessive) to something like “it’s just… you know how you get.” In other words, have Ashley referring to the problem without quite naming it…

Oh – and it might be good if there was a veiled hint of what was to come, earlier on. I mean heavily veiled, so that its true meaning would only be realised after reading to the end. Just a thought.

I thought this very well written, John; nicely constructed, with the flashback. I kept wanting to read on. The only suggestion I would make is in the ending. “He was my first” is good because you immediately think she means her first time with a man, but quickly we see that’s not what she meant – which gives away the ending too soon. Much as I…[Read more]