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I would definitely read on, since that’s what you asked, and I really enjoyed the contrast between the first and second sections. The tense change helps to separate the two, so it isn’t confusing. And I don’t hate prologues! The first bit, the more dreamlike, atmospheric section in the woods, would work as a prologue in my opinion. Of course, I guess it depends on how the rest of your novel is structured; if you’re going to give equal weighting to both voices then obviously not, but if the novel is mostly Laura’s voice in 1998 and 2014, then I think a prologue would be perfectly fine. And you could anchor the reader by including a date, maybe?

I do like your writing. And you’re very good at dialogue!