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Only just found this Janette – brilliant and well-deserved news. Keep us posted.

Massive congratulations Janette. Looking forward to reading it!

J. That’s AMAZING! You are storming the flash scene! Are they putting together an anthology? Or website publication, or something?

And yeah, when you have a pub date/name, pop it on the Podium forum so’s we can all cheer.

Hel you are ace, and that’s got to be a huge boost in writing motivation! Would love to see the magic 500words if/when you feel like sharing. Pretty please!

Brilliant news Janette – definitely one for the Podium. And make sure you put a note there when the story’s published 🙂

Yay for the recording!!! Hope we can access it somehow when it goes up. *crosses fingers*

And no excuses necessary for shouting, WE ARE ALL SO PROUD OF HER!!!!!

Taking on board the comments so far, here’s an edited version, with a title change.

The First Time
Two men wearing overcoats followed the nurse down the corridor.
“Florence has quite perked up since you arranged this visit so she should be able to answer your questions. She’ll tire quickly, though, remember she’s over ninety.”
“Thank you, we’l…[Read more]

Ding ding ding – nope, still true! Brilliant news, Janette. Well done. And yes, it sounds very unusual.

Thanks Tony, good points, noted.
Thanks, Elle. I guess my spell checker doesn’t speak French! Good points. I think I have a tendency to over-explain or I would have ended it at “He was my first”. Need to trust the reader more. The telly paragraph is a bit of a cop out – I’ll need to rewrite it.

I can’t remember what the original prompt was, but I…[Read more]

You’re welcome, Bren. Lovely to see so many familiar names, indeed

Good luck for when you sub! Xx

Yes, definetly more oblique, great. I wonder if you might change the ‘I hate sharing you’ lime (which makes Ashley sounds possessive) to something like “it’s just… you know how you get.” In other words, have Ashley referring to the problem without quite naming it…