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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 9 months ago
I think “Spotting an opening…” needs a new para. The lipstick thing is a little over complicated, I think you could shorten it without losing anything.
The “pills like skittles” analogy doesn’t work for me.
“Small-to-medium-time” seems a cop-out, he’s a small-time crook, I think.
“Anticipated to sit..” should be “anticipated sitting”.I’d take…[Read more]
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Debi Alper posted an update 7 years, 9 months ago
Someone on the current self-edit course has just posted this link about creating suspense and I thought I’d share it here: http://www.writersdigest.com/online-editor/6-secrets-to-creating-and-sustaining-suspense
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Libby replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 9 months ago
Thanks for your notes, Raine. They are very helpful and come at a timely moment as I polish the structure of my novel in progress.
A few immediate thoughts which may not stand up to scrutiny. Athelstone wonders about the universality of such frameworks. This has always been my question too. They seem to me too rigid to allow for individual…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 9 months ago
I remember doing these sessions at York…it all seemed to make perfect sense when CMT was explaining it, but I can’t put it into practise. I don’t think I have the kind of logical and structural mind that can break a story down into these kind of segments. Which is annoying, because I know it’s all good stuff and very useful – I just can’t apply…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 9 months ago
Very nice… There were a couple of points only that tripped me up in the reading:
‘Tasha and she nicked the lipstick’. Didn’t sound right. I wondered about ‘She’d nicked the lipstick when she was with Tasha’, but wasn’t sure how that’d affect your word count.
‘The salty scent of sweaty skin trapped in every pore’. I read this first as the sweaty…[Read more] -
Kate replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 9 months ago
This is great Raine. I’ve read a few structure books and I can see how they all reflect in this arc. It’s nice to have it in this concise summary. I’m going to print it out and pin it to the wall!
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John S Alty posted an update 7 years, 9 months ago
Market day in town so I’m off to see what treasures I can find at the book stall.
I’ve rediscovered the joy of real books now I’ve ditched my annoying Kindle.-
Nothing beats a good rummage through bookshops/book stalls, does it? But I confess I do love my kindle very, very muchly. 🙂
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Nothing can beat the smell of books.
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Magical, I agree, but then again Pebby’s pie shop in the village has a certain attraction, too.
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OOOOOh! Pieeees! I am rather partial to a pork pie!
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My problem is more with amazon than the kindle per se. I’m happy to read on an ipad, I just don’t want the intrusive presence of amazon.
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Squidge replied to the topic Mentorship Scheme – Writing East Midlands in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 9 months ago
Don’t think I’d qualify as I’m not looking to change genre but am already published… Also can’t commit to the time at the moment 🙁
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Squidge replied to the topic Mentorship Scheme – Writing East Midlands in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 9 months ago
Are you involved in WEM, Philippa? I just received their latest email update and it all sounded a bit highbrow!
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Squidge started the topic Fairlight needs winter/new year stories… in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 9 months ago
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Squidge posted an update 7 years, 9 months ago
Just spotted this if anyone’s got anything that might suit?
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Squidge replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 9 months ago
SloMo. Love it. Matches me perfectly.
(Although I did manage a couple of hours yesterday on the WIP – nothing new added, but dialogue’s snappier!)
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Squidge replied to the topic New title needed for 'Snatched' – help! in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 9 months ago
I like Two Cities and the Void, but wonder whether, for the novel as you’ve described it, The Void Between Two Cities works better? Which is more central to the story – the space between, or the actual cities? Looks like you’re getting closer to finding your title though.
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Squidge replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 9 months ago
Mine would definitely be a slow write. I have no idea how I’m going to get any writing done at all between now and the New Year… Not even my Room with a view! 🙁
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly comp – October 2018 in the forum Monthly Competition 7 years, 9 months ago
The Banjo
The phone rings in the lost property office at Euston Station in London.
“Lost Property, Smith speaking, how may we help?”
He takes a sip from his tea, listens.
“Yes, sir, anything left on a train on this line ends up here. Assuming it’s turned in, like. What have you lost?
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John S Alty replied to the topic Short Story Publication/Competition in the forum Podium 7 years, 9 months ago
Well done, good job as usual, L!
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Libby replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 9 months ago
It’s not my cup of tea but I’m supportive of anyone who does it. I know someone who sets her own word count for the month and that works well for her.
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