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Philippa East replied to the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
okay, might be waffling on a bit here, but it’s sparked a load of thoughts.
In general I like the opening couple of paragraphs. It paints a strong and immediate picture of character and place.
You set up the omniscient narrator with the phrase highlighted in bold below.
“When the lights went out across Europe, Lina Stephenson did not notice at…[Read more] -
Philippa East replied to the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Hi Raine,
I love the sound of this story. A literary apocalyptic novel? YES PLEASE!
I definitely like the idea of having scenes from various characters’ lives, i.e. to have sections in different POVs. I think it serves the genre well because it creates an epic, global canvas for your story. Basically – how is the human race as a whole going to…[Read more]
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Changed my ‘base’ name from Lorraine Wilson to Raine, so’s it’s easier to tag me. Else it just gets confusing to try to work out how to tag…
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Raine replied to the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Dammit autocorrect! I’d not spotted the domain thing. Gah.
But thank-you for the vote of confidence. I’ve been vacillating back and forth like you wouldn’t believe!
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Daedalus replied to the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Personally I like it. The narrator-y bits make the transitions into a sort of PD slide. If you’re going to introduce a range of geographically dispersed characters in a short piece of text, this seems like a good way to do it. And I like the voice
‘This was a Sunday, the day it began was a Thursday’ – comma splice?
‘Domain’ – Demain? (French for…[Read more]
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Raine started the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
I’ve tinkered with this about 600 times, and now can’t tell whether the narrator-type voice works for this. It doesn’t stay this ‘external’ beyond this first chapter, but it felt like the best way to tie all the characters and inciting moments together. But now I have doubts…Any thoughts v welcome. (1,500 words ish, but even just thoughts on the…[Read more]
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Squidge started the topic Identification – and how you can create it in your novel in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 7 months ago
Rod Duncan’s a great author, very involved in Writing East Midlands. This link to his podcast gives lots of ideas of how to help your readers identify with the characters in your novel. It’s only six minutes long…
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Jules replied to the topic Den monthly competition September 2018 in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 7 months ago
Impact
The EVA suit’s read-out flashed Warning! Oxygen levels at 18% in eerie red. Jepson’s mind was foggy, irrational. All her training hadn’t prepared her for the reality of being stuffed into a damaged evacuation tube and launched into the airless void.
It had begun with impact. Many in fact, although Jepson only counted three as notew…[Read more]
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Raine started the topic Pitching opportunity for northern writers in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 7 months ago
DHH literary agency are holding a pitching event aimed at increasing accesibility for writers outside the southeast! Yay. It’s in York, which honestly, not north. But we take what we can, I guess!
http://www.dhhliteraryagency.com/blog/pitch-dhh-york
The event is on Dec 1st, but you have to submit and then they’ll invite you to pitch. Check the…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Ta, Jonathan. ‘couple of tiny wibbles’… I can live with that. 😉
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Amanda Berriman (Skylark) replied to the topic New Blog from Emma Darwin in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Bit late to this but yes, I’ve done (am doing!) a version of this. It works best when I’m trying to finish something. I’ve got a chart with a chain of squares and the idea is to make the chain as long as possible without breaking it. There’s no daily word count to reach. As long as I write a sentence, I can colour in a square. It’s worked…[Read more]
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Amanda Berriman (Skylark) replied to the topic Festival Dreams in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Lovely to meet you, Anna. I hope you had a great festival! 😊😊
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Amanda Berriman (Skylark) replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 7 years, 7 months ago
😊😊😊
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KazG replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 7 years, 7 months ago
@debi, you can get here via Writers Forum/Den of Writers/Podium. There are many winding roads in the Den and I’m still working them out myself! I’m also eagerly awaiting such a link (OMG CAN YOU IMAGINE??) and you will definitely know about it the minute (if/when) it happens…
@skylark I’m already leaning on my agent with questions and it’s SO…[Read more]
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KazG replied to the topic Festival Dreams in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Skylark, I wasn’t there to hear you speak, but felt that I was after reading your blog – you’ve obviously inspired so many and there is so much genuine delight at your success. Congratulations and well done you, and I’m so happy that this is happening for you 🙂 I have only read Jessica’s story in Stories For Homes – where it really stood out for…[Read more]
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