John S Alty

I thought this very well written and certainly not slow. However, as the opening to a novel, in view of what you tell us is going to happen, I feel it needs a hook. Perhaps a short chapter before this one, whetting the readers appetite.
Just my opinion, as always, so ignore at will.

Thoughts:
A quarterly competition? Winner sets the subject for the next comp, but doesn’t judge it. Prize is a virtual Gold Quill.
The judging is either by a panel or a vote of the participants, or an open vote.
Critique of the entries? By who? Needs some ideas. Maybe submit the winning entry to a magazine or competition?

Have a good weekend, everybody.

Works for me, good idea.

Good one, Daeds, thank you.

How incredibly generous of you to share your notes in this way, KazG. Thank you.

Richard,
My late father would tell of a train crash in Diggle, then in Yorkshire, in 1923 or 1924. He was four and witnessed the accident whilst out walking with his granddad. He was interviewed by the local newspaper and is reported to have said “It were a grand smash” or similar. I see from google that four people died, so it probably wasn’t so…[Read more]

Really enjoy these tales of the rails, thank you.

I know I’m incredibly talented, Daeds, I’m just pretending to be modest.

Thanks Philippa, Thea. Not much prospect of me progressing but I’m sure Elle is in with a chance.

Thanks, @JaneShuff

I made the long list for the Ink Tears Short Story Competition 2018.

The results are in!

Jonathan: A really clever piece of writing, wry observation. Excellent.

Libby: A pleasing little tale, well written and with a message. Good job.

Daedalus: Hugely enjoyable and accomplished description of life with a new puppy and the utter contentment that comes with its unreserved adoration. Liked it a lot.

So, eenie,…[Read more]

Well done to the three of you! I’ll give these tales due consideration during the day and post the result by this evening.

Well done Philippa!