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Kate replied to the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 4 months ago
Thanks @bella – it was fun to write.
Perfect @squidge, that’s great to know it’s about right. I was worrying it was a bit densely packed but maybe I just have to be careful of too heavy descriptions. I shall tweak as suggested.
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Kate started the topic Mid grade 1st chapter in the forum Critiques 6 years, 4 months ago
I’ve got a draft of what is meant to be an upper mid grade novel, but I have concerns I’ve written it in a too Young Adult style. I’m specifically looking for feedback from experienced MG writers on whether I need to adjust the language/structure, and how I might go about it.
All other comments also welcome.
Many thanks.(As usual the…[Read more]
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Kate posted an update 6 years, 4 months ago
Are there any mid grade writers on the Den that would be willing to take a look at the first chapter of my MG book? Someone suggested I was using a YA style that might not be appropriate and I can see what they mean. I’d like thoughts on language and structure relating to MG books before embarking on the next edit.
I’ll post it up in crit for…[Read more]-
Hi Kate,
Just noticed this. If you post it, I’m read it but not sure how much help I’ll be.-
*I’ll*
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Thanks @seagreen. I’ll post it up tomorrow.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 4 months ago
Well done Libby, excellent. Good job, Jane.
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 4 months ago
Thank you, @Janette !
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Libby started the topic Monthly competition – February 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 4 months ago
One of the novels I enjoyed reading in 2019 was The First Day by Phil Harrison. For the February competition please write a piece which depicts or refers to the first day of something – anything you like.
It can be a complete story or the start of a longer one. Maximum 400 words but a shorter entry is fine.
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 4 months ago
Thank you, @janeshuff . This is the first time I’ve won a monthly Den competition and I’m really pleased, and especially so as everyone else’s entries were excellent and a delight to read. Many thanks!
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John S Alty posted an update 6 years, 4 months ago
The activity thread is rather strange since the DIY MA programme got underway – it’s like overhearing half a conversation. Intriguing.
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Unfortunately, WordPress with its plugins that give us groups etc. has a fair few bugs. For some unknown reason, the DIY MA group, in spite of being set as private, spills its conversations if you select Activity whether you’re a member or not.
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You should join us, John. It’s very relaxed!
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Yeah, soz about that. I and the admins have both (all) tried to sort it and it just isn’t playing. Frustrating, but if it lures you into joining in, then maybe that’s a win!
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Kate replied to the topic Class 3 Writing Exercise "I Don't Remember" – KazG in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 4 months agoThis is so clever, Kaz. And I didn’t expect it to go in that direction either. Wow. Excellent stuff.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Dipping my toe back in in the forum Blogs 6 years, 4 months ago
Hi @skylark, good to see you’re back.
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Libby replied to the topic Brexit dismay in the forum Coffee Shop 6 years, 4 months ago
Thanks, @Daedalus. I’ll read the article with interest 🙂
I can use castor oil as a bit of sensory detail in my novel. It was just that I know the smell of linseed but can’t remember the smell of castor though tins of Castrol were ubiquitous during my childhood, as was the smell of oil in general.I suspect the laxative story was probably…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Brexit dismay in the forum Coffee Shop 6 years, 4 months ago
I’m very sorry you and your son have had to cope with a cancer diagnosis, @skylark.
I’ve never signed up to any social media and so far haven’t felt tempted. Not just the polarised views but the amount of time it can take up!
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Libby replied to the topic Brexit dismay in the forum Coffee Shop 6 years, 4 months ago
I’m glad you were able to translate real life into other real life, as it were, @Daedalus . Sounds a very successful strategy.
BTW, please can I ask you a question about linseed oil in biplanes? Was it used or have I imagined this? If it was, presumably pilots and passengers would have been able to smell it?
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Libby replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 4 months ago
The Future (399 words with title)
I awake dry mouthed and tight headed but without the regret usual to such mornings. Sunlight warms the floorboards and in the lane outside my lodging a song thrush rings out his tunes as if he sees something new.
Last night in Sedham’s rooms, while enjoying his Madeira wine and Spanish sherry, I drank down S…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Brexit dismay in the forum Coffee Shop 6 years, 4 months ago
I sympathise with you, Richard, over reading more politics than normal. I was the same then got cross with myself not least because it stole time from other things.
I think some involvement, however, can make one feel better. There are many causes still to fight for – environmental and social – if one is that way inclined. Though preservation of…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Dipping my toe back in in the forum Blogs 6 years, 4 months ago
I think the premise might have been plausible, Jane and Amanda. If I’ve got this right, the telephone lines between the front line and HQ had been cut and therefore the regiment (?) on the front line didn’t have up to date intelligence. The idea was to get the despatch drivers to update the officers on the front line so that they wouldn’t make an…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Dipping my toe back in in the forum Blogs 6 years, 4 months ago
Hello Amanda, it doesn’t sound my kind of thing either. One thing the reviewers said in its favour was how balletic and choreographed it was. Coincidentally I saw a short silent film – 5 minutes or so – a while ago which depicted the Western Front by using only two male dancers in uniform, dancing in slow motion and getting tangled up with each…[Read more]
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Libby replied to the topic Dipping my toe back in in the forum Blogs 6 years, 4 months ago
I haven’t seen 1917, Jane, but the review on either Front Row or Saturday Review concluded that it was a rather unengaging film. I think they ascribed this partly to the camera technique.
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Kate replied to the topic Class 3: Writing Exercise, Bella in the forum
Andrew Wille's DIY MA course 6 years, 4 months agoVery clever in the first one how the letter gives one impression of this inappropriate relationship, and then the following comment throws a whole new light on the situation.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly competition – January 2020 in the forum Monthly Competition 6 years, 4 months ago
Oh, go on Jane, have a peek.You know you want to.
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