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John S Alty replied to the topic TV appearance – Quest, 'Wings of War' in the forum Podium 7 years, 11 months ago
Well done, Daeds, a star is born!
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John S Alty replied to the topic What shape are your ideas? in the forum Blogs 7 years, 11 months ago
I’ve never started a piece of fiction knowing the ending. I like to start with a scene, put a character into it, and see where it goes. I enjoy the ride.
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Hilary replied to the topic CB Creative in the forum Podium 7 years, 11 months ago
Oh, well done, @alanr! That’s fantastic. So which course are you going for?
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Anna replied to the topic CB Creative in the forum Podium 7 years, 11 months ago
Well done Alan! Congratulations!
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Hilary replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 12 months ago
Very interesting blog. I, too, have listened, enthralled, to Craig’s lectures on this, and have read an enormous amount of stuff about structure. I’m struggling rather with it now, at the almost-finished-the-second-draft-of-my-novel-stage. I don’t know if my struggle is because I’ve read too many different models/descriptions and have become…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 12 months ago
Hi L,
I think you could trim most of the paragraphs in the first half of the story, really. The Physics thing (tight pants) early on could go, you use this analogy later on anyway. Watching a film at the cinema, that paragraph could be less wordy I think.
And towards the end – “zipped her hoodie and pulled the hood over her head” etc. I know…[Read more] -
John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 12 months ago
I think “Spotting an opening…” needs a new para. The lipstick thing is a little over complicated, I think you could shorten it without losing anything.
The “pills like skittles” analogy doesn’t work for me.
“Small-to-medium-time” seems a cop-out, he’s a small-time crook, I think.
“Anticipated to sit..” should be “anticipated sitting”.I’d take…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 8 years ago
I remember doing these sessions at York…it all seemed to make perfect sense when CMT was explaining it, but I can’t put it into practise. I don’t think I have the kind of logical and structural mind that can break a story down into these kind of segments. Which is annoying, because I know it’s all good stuff and very useful – I just can’t apply…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 8 years ago
Very nice… There were a couple of points only that tripped me up in the reading:
‘Tasha and she nicked the lipstick’. Didn’t sound right. I wondered about ‘She’d nicked the lipstick when she was with Tasha’, but wasn’t sure how that’d affect your word count.
‘The salty scent of sweaty skin trapped in every pore’. I read this first as the sweaty…[Read more] -
John S Alty posted an update 8 years ago
Market day in town so I’m off to see what treasures I can find at the book stall.
I’ve rediscovered the joy of real books now I’ve ditched my annoying Kindle.-
Nothing beats a good rummage through bookshops/book stalls, does it? But I confess I do love my kindle very, very muchly. 🙂
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Nothing can beat the smell of books.
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Magical, I agree, but then again Pebby’s pie shop in the village has a certain attraction, too.
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OOOOOh! Pieeees! I am rather partial to a pork pie!
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My problem is more with amazon than the kindle per se. I’m happy to read on an ipad, I just don’t want the intrusive presence of amazon.
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Squidge replied to the topic Mentorship Scheme – Writing East Midlands in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 8 years ago
Don’t think I’d qualify as I’m not looking to change genre but am already published… Also can’t commit to the time at the moment 🙁
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Squidge replied to the topic Mentorship Scheme – Writing East Midlands in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 8 years ago
Are you involved in WEM, Philippa? I just received their latest email update and it all sounded a bit highbrow!
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Squidge started the topic Fairlight needs winter/new year stories… in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 8 years ago
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Squidge replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 8 years ago
SloMo. Love it. Matches me perfectly.
(Although I did manage a couple of hours yesterday on the WIP – nothing new added, but dialogue’s snappier!)
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Squidge replied to the topic New title needed for 'Snatched' – help! in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 8 years ago
I like Two Cities and the Void, but wonder whether, for the novel as you’ve described it, The Void Between Two Cities works better? Which is more central to the story – the space between, or the actual cities? Looks like you’re getting closer to finding your title though.
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Squidge replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 8 years ago
Mine would definitely be a slow write. I have no idea how I’m going to get any writing done at all between now and the New Year… Not even my Room with a view! 🙁
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John S Alty replied to the topic Monthly comp – October 2018 in the forum Monthly Competition 8 years ago
The Banjo
The phone rings in the lost property office at Euston Station in London.
“Lost Property, Smith speaking, how may we help?”
He takes a sip from his tea, listens.
“Yes, sir, anything left on a train on this line ends up here. Assuming it’s turned in, like. What have you lost?
“So, a banjo is it sir? Well let me have a look, won’t be…[Read more] - Load More
