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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I often think “getting” story structure is like one of those damn magic eye puzzles. All these people around you are like “oh yeah! It’s dolphins!!” while you’re staring at it like, “whaaa?”
And then, you glimpse it (maybe in a CM Taylor workshop), but then it’s gone again. You glimpse it, it disappears, you glimpse it, you go…[Read more]
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JaneShuff replied to the topic When to start querying (submitting) your novel in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 8 months ago
I think we all did that with our first book Raine! And some of us, with our second…
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I know what you mean, Hilary. And FWIW I try now not to worry too much about the minutiae of all the different (with a lot of similarities) theories of story structure. That way lies madness for me. I read them and enjoy them and sometimes I get a light bulb moment and often some part of them sticks in my mind and comes to the fore when I’m trying…[Read more]
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Hilary replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Very interesting blog. I, too, have listened, enthralled, to Craig’s lectures on this, and have read an enormous amount of stuff about structure. I’m struggling rather with it now, at the almost-finished-the-second-draft-of-my-novel-stage. I don’t know if my struggle is because I’ve read too many different models/descriptions and have become…[Read more]
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Daedalus started the topic When to start querying (submitting) your novel in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 8 months ago
An interesting blogpost discussing at what point your novel might be ready to send to agents etc. Also useful on subbing short stories
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Elle replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
@StellaOlivetti – thank you for your feedback and please don’t feel back about nitpicking. I like nitpicking, I want nitpicking because that’s what’s going to help me improve on my story so all your comments are very helpful!
The main reason about the grandmother being Russian is a kind of nod at Neil Gaiman and American Gods and the idea that…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Hi L,
I think you could trim most of the paragraphs in the first half of the story, really. The Physics thing (tight pants) early on could go, you use this analogy later on anyway. Watching a film at the cinema, that paragraph could be less wordy I think.
And towards the end – “zipped her hoodie and pulled the hood over her head” etc. I know…[Read more] -
JaneShuff replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Still missing three quarters of the story….
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Daedalus replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
Ah, yes. Planning. It’s going…um…
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Elle replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
@johnSAlty — thanks John for your feedback it’s all very useful. As a matter of interest any particular paragraphs you felt were overwritten?
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Athelstone replied to the topic NaNoWriMo in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 8 months ago
That’s the most important bit done.
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Thank you for a very interesting read Daedalus. You have made me want to go and watch the film. I am
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I absolutely agree with you Raine about not every character progressing through their arc in synchrony and entirety but nevertheless needing some sort of arc. I have only recently realised that this gives the relationships between characters energy and life as they shift according to where they are in their ‘journey’. It is a powerful tool.
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
Thanks Raine. I’ve seen the film numerous times over the years (the first being as a very small child) and have got different things from it each time. One reading would definitely be a clash between rival alpha males. And it’s definitely in the ‘high adventure’ tradition, but I do think there’s more to it than that. Not least as ultimatel…[Read more]
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John S Alty replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
I think “Spotting an opening…” needs a new para. The lipstick thing is a little over complicated, I think you could shorten it without losing anything.
The “pills like skittles” analogy doesn’t work for me.
“Small-to-medium-time” seems a cop-out, he’s a small-time crook, I think.
“Anticipated to sit..” should be “anticipated sitting”.I’d take…[Read more]
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Daedalus replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I was watching the film The Flight of the Phoenix earlier today, and this ‘arc’ kept occuring to me, so for the sake of curiosity I decided to have a look to see if it fit this structure, and if so, how. It’s a bit of an interesting case as it’s an ensemble piece with multiple ‘main’ characters, each with their own arc. I’ll consider it for the…[Read more]
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Philippa East replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
@janeshuff, that’s a great way of putting it. Yes, “the broad sweeps” and then refining in the edits.
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JaneShuff replied to the topic Some notes on Dara Marks' Transformational Arc in the forum Blogs 7 years, 8 months ago
I too tend not too worry too much about the overall structure when I’m actually in the thick of writing a first draft but I have found that reading the various books about structure has helped me be aware of the broad sweeps of the shape of a story as I’m thinking it out.
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Elle replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago
Thanks you both for your feedback.
@squidge — thanks for mentioning those sentences tripped you. I am sometimes unsure when a sentence makes me trip if it’s because it is or just because I am not used to it as English is not my first language.
@jonathan — thanks for spotting that typo, indeed it should be “lager” and not “larger”.
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