fransico alice

SECRETS
It was closing time at the library. The best time of day as far as Charlie was concerned. At last he could spend some time alone with the books, wiping covers and aligning spines, handling the stories that could transport him to a different world. It was just a pity he had to share them with other people’s sticky fingers.

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Ha, lovely closing lines, Libby.

Fab Elle. These are great.

Thanks, Sandra.

That would be a nice touch, Sandra. He’s 18 and it’s his pride and joy.

I do that too, Sandra.

Thanks Sandra. The ‘mate’ was an attempt to show gender. Always tricky in first person. I’ve never been on a motorbike so your observations are most useful, as are your suggested tweaks. Much appreciated.

Thanks Bella. I’m relieved it works for you and thanks for all the tweaks. Definitely should be ‘they would come for me.’ Great catch.

Some lovely, quality writing, Bella.

I do agree with the others that I didn’t need quite so much information about the Bert back story. That did slow it down.

I liked this bit. ‘The conversation could go either way. She held her breath’ It really had me thinking uh-oh, what is this mother going to be like? Is she mentally unstable and going to…[Read more]

Wonderful news. Congratulations. And very interesting about the previous rejections. Subjective, as you say.

Fabulous Fiona. This is one I want to read, but I’m waiting for the paperback.

Thanks Kaz. I’m going to print this out and have a thorough read.

Brilliant Stevie. Have to say I loved that story, so I’m not surprised.

Congratulations John and Elle.

Well done, Elle. 🙂

Thanks Elle. Setting is something I usually skim over, so I will try applying this and see what happens!

This is great Raine. I’ve read a few structure books and I can see how they all reflect in this arc. It’s nice to have it in this concise summary. I’m going to print it out and pin it to the wall!

I think you’ve just answered your own question. 😀 Good luck with developing it.