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Mad Iguana replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
It’s great, Squidge! My personal taste would have been to start with:
“By Tilda’s twenty-sixth attempt to produce an illuminorb, Silviu’s patience…”
But I can’t say that would be better (in fact, it’s grammatically very awkward… so probably worse); it’s just how I would have done it. Otherwise, a cracking piece with a ton of world-building and…[Read more] -
Daedalus replied to the topic Short Story Publication/Competition in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago
Nice one, well done Elle đ Just off to have a read
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Mad Iguana replied to the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 8 years, 1 month ago
Just noticed that people may not realise that by “I” in the post above, I mean the “@denofwriters” twitter account, which I’m currently curating.
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Daedalus replied to the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 8 years, 1 month ago
Good idea, Mad. Can’t think of anything right now, but will rack my brains. Would be great to see others’ suggestions
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Mad Iguana started the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 8 years, 1 month ago
Anyone who’s been on Twitter may have noticed that I’m tweeting out some small nuggets of writing advice that I’ve found helpful.
I’m hoping to continue to do this on a semi-regular basis, but…
As I only have a limited number that are any use (if I had lots, I’d be a better writer than I am!), I wondered if any of the Denizens here had any that…[Read more] -
Squidge replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
Apologies for the formatting! That’ll teach me to cut and paste…
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Squidge started the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
…how does this grab you?
It wasnât until her twenty-seventh attempt that Tilda finally managed to produce her first illuminorb.
And a good job, too, because by the twenty-sixth attempt, Silviuâs patience was wearing very thin. âConcentrate, Tilda,â the Ambakian powermage snapped.
âI am concentrating.â Tilda rubbed her palm against her…[Read more] -
Squidge started the topic On a more positive note… in the forum Blogs 8 years, 1 month ago
Just to make up for the rather morose blog I shared a few days ago about the demise of the cloud, here’s one that is decidedly more upbeat. And has nothing to do with writing except for having a shout-out for the Den!
(Promise I won’t post tons of Scribbles links – I’ll only post the writingy ones from here on in!)
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Squidge posted an update 8 years, 1 month ago
So… I really ought to do some housework before I do any writing today.
What’s that? You think I ought to do the writing first? Oh….go on, then. I will. Wordy Wednesday, here I come đ
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Absolutely. In fact, doing the housework is clearly procrastination which you should avoid at all costs
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So far, have written a blog post, messaged a friend who is feeling frazzled about son starting uni, and am about to do a bit on the WIP. Happy Squidge!
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Janette replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago
Happy dancing along with the rest, Kaz! Congratulations – this is so exciting. Sorry I’ve not been in among the beta readers but I’d love to catch up with this some time.
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Squidge replied to the topic Chapter seven – a spider's path in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
I did wonder if there was an act involved… Not convinced you need lots more ‘innits’ unless he’s thinking them. Glad the thoughts were useful x
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John S Alty replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
Thank you Squidge,I appreciate the input. Food for thought.
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John S Alty replied to the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 8 years, 1 month ago
Thanks Jules.
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Squidge replied to the topic Chapter seven – a spider's path in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
I have so missed reading your writing! So good to see you here x
Ooh… I like this. Love the ramblings of his mind and the nuggets he reveals. I think I only noticed one it’s instead of its towards the start, so don’t worry so much about the dyslexia…
The first thing I picked up on are his speech/thought patterns. By which I mean he sounds…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
Like it. You mentioned ‘telly’ bits – as in telling, rather than showing. So when we first meet Florence, you tell us ‘a woman was sitting in a chair’ – a simple change like ‘a woman sat in a chair, eyes on the tv’ can make it less so. Similarly, towards the end, ‘He held a glass in each hand which…’could become something like ‘The glasses in…[Read more]
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Daedalus replied to the topic Short Story Publication/Competition in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago
Read some of those stories, @johnalty – superb stuff, all with a strong, distinct voice. Even a couple of twists. Looking forward to finding @elle‘s stuff too
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John S Alty replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
You mean the coppery tang of blood as her scalpel slices through pale flesh?! Just kidding. I know what you mean, Laure, I need to work on the atmosphere.
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John S Alty started the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 8 years, 1 month ago
Can someone explain this “friends” thing? I have seen it on other forums, so I know it’s a recognized feature. And I’ve had “friend requests” to which I always respond positively. What I don’t get is what it does that just being a member of the forum doesn’t. Aren’t we all friends? Confused.
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