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Squidge started the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

…how does this grab you?

It wasn’t until her twenty-seventh attempt that Tilda finally managed to produce her first illuminorb.
And a good job, too, because by the twenty-sixth attempt, Silviu’s patience was wearing very thin. “Concentrate, Tilda,” the Ambakian powermage snapped.
“I am concentrating.” Tilda rubbed her palm against her…[Read more]
Squidge started the topic On a more positive note… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 10 months ago

Just to make up for the rather morose blog I shared a few days ago about the demise of the cloud, here’s one that is decidedly more upbeat. And has nothing to do with writing except for having a shout-out for the Den!

(Promise I won’t post tons of Scribbles links – I’ll only post the writingy ones from here on in!)
Philippa East replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

Hi Elle,

I remember you talking about this story, and I really like it. A very clever twist on the oldest of tales.

I think you set things up well: we are expecting her to be the victim, but it shifts dramatically and she becomes the predator, turning the tables with her newly-discovered sexual power. Your writing, descriptions etc. as always,…[Read more]
Philippa East replied to the topic The Disappearance of Rebecca Faulks (short Story – 2,800 words) in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

Hi Elle,
Yes, I can see how that addition can work to show her trying and failing.
xx
Squidge posted an update 7 years, 10 months ago

So… I really ought to do some housework before I do any writing today.

What’s that? You think I ought to do the writing first? Oh….go on, then. I will. Wordy Wednesday, here I come 😉
- Daedalus replied 7 years, 10 months ago
  
  Absolutely. In fact, doing the housework is clearly procrastination which you should avoid at all costs
  - Squidge replied 7 years, 10 months ago
    
    So far, have written a blog post, messaged a friend who is feeling frazzled about son starting uni, and am about to do a bit on the WIP. Happy Squidge!
Squidge replied to the topic Chapter seven – a spider's path in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

I did wonder if there was an act involved… Not convinced you need lots more ‘innits’ unless he’s thinking them. Glad the thoughts were useful x
John S Alty replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

Thank you Squidge,I appreciate the input. Food for thought.
John S Alty replied to the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 10 months ago

Thanks Jules.
Squidge replied to the topic Chapter seven – a spider's path in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

I have so missed reading your writing! So good to see you here x

Ooh… I like this. Love the ramblings of his mind and the nuggets he reveals. I think I only noticed one it’s instead of its towards the start, so don’t worry so much about the dyslexia…

The first thing I picked up on are his speech/thought patterns. By which I mean he sounds…[Read more]
Squidge replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

Like it. You mentioned ‘telly’ bits – as in telling, rather than showing. So when we first meet Florence, you tell us ‘a woman was sitting in a chair’ – a simple change like ‘a woman sat in a chair, eyes on the tv’ can make it less so. Similarly, towards the end, ‘He held a glass in each hand which…’could become something like ‘The glasses in…[Read more]
Jules replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 7 years, 10 months ago

Thabks for the shout out, Kaz 😊 it was your talent and perseverence that won the day though xxx
Jules replied to the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 10 months ago

There are two things it does do, John.

1 – it forms one of the filters on what you want to see on the main wall (Activity tab on main menu). You can toggle through the sub menu and choose to only see what friends have said. Right now we’re a small forum of 70 but if we hit a couple of 1000 of active users, you might very well prefer to just see…[Read more]
John S Alty replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 7 years, 10 months ago

You mean the coppery tang of blood as her scalpel slices through pale flesh?! Just kidding. I know what you mean, Laure, I need to work on the atmosphere.
I hope this exercise is helping others to get a grasp of what makes a story work – join in everyone.
John S Alty started the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 7 years, 10 months ago

Can someone explain this “friends” thing? I have seen it on other forums, so I know it’s a recognized feature. And I’ve had “friend requests” to which I always respond positively. What I don’t get is what it does that just being a member of the forum doesn’t. Aren’t we all friends? Confused.
Athelstone posted an update 7 years, 10 months ago

I feel another tip coming on. Desperate to retrieve something from the Word Cloud? Do you know some distinctive word or phrase in the text? Well, it’s worth a try, but prepare for disappointment. While the Cloud was up and about, Google cached a lot of its content on its own servers. It does this with many sites to speed up searches. So you could…[Read more]
Mad Iguana replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 7 years, 10 months ago

I’m doing the moonwalk here for you, Kaz. Slippin’ and a slidin’ all over the place in celebration.
Well done!! Delighted for you and Ava and the agent and PRH who have a great book that’ll sell bucketloads.
Giselle replied to the topic Flash Fiction Win – posted in the right place now, I hope 😉 in the forum Podium 7 years, 10 months ago

It was lovely to see you again at York, Janette. Bravo for your double-win ! Your story is emotionally rich and poignant without reaching pathos or simplicity. Beautifully done, and a well-deserved victory (victories).
Giselle replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 7 years, 10 months ago

Kaz, this is so exciting – not one bit of good news, but TWO: new agent AND Penguin’s interest! Yes yes yes yes yes!!! Going with the agent you felt the most comfortable with seems the way to go.

I’m so happy for you!
Mad Iguana replied to the topic Flash Fiction Win – posted in the right place now, I hope 😉 in the forum Podium 7 years, 10 months ago

Amazing stuff Janette. Well done!!
Hilary replied to the topic Flash Fiction Win – posted in the right place now, I hope 😉 in the forum Podium 7 years, 10 months ago

Well done, Janette! Good for you.
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