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Raine replied to the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Dammit autocorrect! I’d not spotted the domain thing. Gah.
But thank-you for the vote of confidence. I’ve been vacillating back and forth like you wouldn’t believe!
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Daedalus replied to the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Personally I like it. The narrator-y bits make the transitions into a sort of PD slide. If you’re going to introduce a range of geographically dispersed characters in a short piece of text, this seems like a good way to do it. And I like the voice
‘This was a Sunday, the day it began was a Thursday’ – comma splice?
‘Domain’ – Demain? (French for…[Read more]
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Raine started the topic Wip beginning… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
I’ve tinkered with this about 600 times, and now can’t tell whether the narrator-type voice works for this. It doesn’t stay this ‘external’ beyond this first chapter, but it felt like the best way to tie all the characters and inciting moments together. But now I have doubts…Any thoughts v welcome. (1,500 words ish, but even just thoughts on the…[Read more]
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Squidge started the topic Identification – and how you can create it in your novel in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 7 months ago
Rod Duncan’s a great author, very involved in Writing East Midlands. This link to his podcast gives lots of ideas of how to help your readers identify with the characters in your novel. It’s only six minutes long…
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Ah, a familiar face! A griffin?
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I think so. I doodled it on a post it note years ago while on the phone, but quite liked the pic so I kept the jpeg around. They also feature in the WIP.
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Nice. I look forward to reading some of that. A griffin featured in the book that got me enthusiastic about reading in my childhood, so I have a soft spot for them
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Jules replied to the topic Den monthly competition September 2018 in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 7 months ago
Impact
The EVA suit’s read-out flashed Warning! Oxygen levels at 18% in eerie red. Jepson’s mind was foggy, irrational. All her training hadn’t prepared her for the reality of being stuffed into a damaged evacuation tube and launched into the airless void.
It had begun with impact. Many in fact, although Jepson only counted three as notew…[Read more]
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Raine started the topic Pitching opportunity for northern writers in the forum Competitions, Open calls and Writing Opportunities 7 years, 7 months ago
DHH literary agency are holding a pitching event aimed at increasing accesibility for writers outside the southeast! Yay. It’s in York, which honestly, not north. But we take what we can, I guess!
http://www.dhhliteraryagency.com/blog/pitch-dhh-york
The event is on Dec 1st, but you have to submit and then they’ll invite you to pitch. Check the…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Ta, Jonathan. ‘couple of tiny wibbles’… I can live with that. 😉
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Amanda Berriman (Skylark) replied to the topic New Blog from Emma Darwin in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Bit late to this but yes, I’ve done (am doing!) a version of this. It works best when I’m trying to finish something. I’ve got a chart with a chain of squares and the idea is to make the chain as long as possible without breaking it. There’s no daily word count to reach. As long as I write a sentence, I can colour in a square. It’s worked…[Read more]
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Amanda Berriman (Skylark) replied to the topic Festival Dreams in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Lovely to meet you, Anna. I hope you had a great festival! 😊😊
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Amanda Berriman (Skylark) replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 7 years, 7 months ago
😊😊😊
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Jonathan replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Hi Squidge. I think the second one is much smoother. For me, there are no points where the “forward-motion” (if you know what I mean) vanishes. The situation is clear, and the level of tension is good – I am thinking that her creating the illuminorb is the “hmm … that’s rather interesting” thing of note that happens before the “yeah, ok, now that…[Read more]
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