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Squidge replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

Apologies for the formatting! That’ll teach me to cut and paste…
Squidge started the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

…how does this grab you?

It wasn’t until her twenty-seventh attempt that Tilda finally managed to produce her first illuminorb.
And a good job, too, because by the twenty-sixth attempt, Silviu’s patience was wearing very thin. “Concentrate, Tilda,” the Ambakian powermage snapped.
“I am concentrating.” Tilda rubbed her palm against her…[Read more]
Squidge started the topic On a more positive note… in the forum Blogs 8 years, 1 month ago

Just to make up for the rather morose blog I shared a few days ago about the demise of the cloud, here’s one that is decidedly more upbeat. And has nothing to do with writing except for having a shout-out for the Den!

(Promise I won’t post tons of Scribbles links – I’ll only post the writingy ones from here on in!)
Philippa East replied to the topic Red (short story – 2,600 words) in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

Hi Elle,

I remember you talking about this story, and I really like it. A very clever twist on the oldest of tales.

I think you set things up well: we are expecting her to be the victim, but it shifts dramatically and she becomes the predator, turning the tables with her newly-discovered sexual power. Your writing, descriptions etc. as always,…[Read more]
Philippa East replied to the topic The Disappearance of Rebecca Faulks (short Story – 2,800 words) in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

Hi Elle,
Yes, I can see how that addition can work to show her trying and failing.
xx
Squidge posted an update 8 years, 1 month ago

So… I really ought to do some housework before I do any writing today.

What’s that? You think I ought to do the writing first? Oh….go on, then. I will. Wordy Wednesday, here I come 😉
- Daedalus replied 8 years, 1 month ago
  
  Absolutely. In fact, doing the housework is clearly procrastination which you should avoid at all costs
  - Squidge replied 8 years, 1 month ago
    
    So far, have written a blog post, messaged a friend who is feeling frazzled about son starting uni, and am about to do a bit on the WIP. Happy Squidge!
Squidge replied to the topic Chapter seven – a spider's path in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

I did wonder if there was an act involved… Not convinced you need lots more ‘innits’ unless he’s thinking them. Glad the thoughts were useful x
John S Alty replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

Thank you Squidge,I appreciate the input. Food for thought.
John S Alty replied to the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 8 years, 1 month ago

Thanks Jules.
Squidge replied to the topic Chapter seven – a spider's path in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

I have so missed reading your writing! So good to see you here x

Ooh… I like this. Love the ramblings of his mind and the nuggets he reveals. I think I only noticed one it’s instead of its towards the start, so don’t worry so much about the dyslexia…

The first thing I picked up on are his speech/thought patterns. By which I mean he sounds…[Read more]
Squidge replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

Like it. You mentioned ‘telly’ bits – as in telling, rather than showing. So when we first meet Florence, you tell us ‘a woman was sitting in a chair’ – a simple change like ‘a woman sat in a chair, eyes on the tv’ can make it less so. Similarly, towards the end, ‘He held a glass in each hand which…’could become something like ‘The glasses in…[Read more]
Daedalus replied to the topic Short Story Publication/Competition in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago

Read some of those stories, @johnalty – superb stuff, all with a strong, distinct voice. Even a couple of twists. Looking forward to finding @elle‘s stuff too
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Jackie Wesley replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago

Well done. That’s wonderful. It must be a fab book to have an agent and publisher chasing you and not without a great deal of hard work and effort behind it. Congratulations!
John S Alty replied to the topic Memories in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago

You mean the coppery tang of blood as her scalpel slices through pale flesh?! Just kidding. I know what you mean, Laure, I need to work on the atmosphere.
I hope this exercise is helping others to get a grasp of what makes a story work – join in everyone.
John S Alty started the topic Friends in the forum Coffee Shop 8 years, 1 month ago

Can someone explain this “friends” thing? I have seen it on other forums, so I know it’s a recognized feature. And I’ve had “friend requests” to which I always respond positively. What I don’t get is what it does that just being a member of the forum doesn’t. Aren’t we all friends? Confused.
Bella replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago

How lovely. I’m very happy for you.
Athelstone posted an update 8 years, 1 month ago

I feel another tip coming on. Desperate to retrieve something from the Word Cloud? Do you know some distinctive word or phrase in the text? Well, it’s worth a try, but prepare for disappointment. While the Cloud was up and about, Google cached a lot of its content on its own servers. It does this with many sites to speed up searches. So you could…[Read more]
Seagreen replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago

Oh. My. Giddy. Aunt! Amazing news! So pleased for you!
Mad Iguana replied to the topic Receiving an email headed 'Offer of Representation'…. in the forum Podium 8 years, 1 month ago

I’m doing the moonwalk here for you, Kaz. Slippin’ and a slidin’ all over the place in celebration.
Well done!! Delighted for you and Ava and the agent and PRH who have a great book that’ll sell bucketloads.
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