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Mad Iguana replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
That’s very true, Squidge. TBH, I’d say I’d re-write it about fifty times before I got anywhere and then probably end up with the first version in the end.
I think, given your focus, your approach is accurate. What I was trying to do was remove the certainty of her having succeeded on the 27th go. -
Seagreen replied to the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 7 months ago
Make time for day-dreaming. Fifteen minutes of doing nothing, except thinking about a particular scene, can help you visualise better.
Atmospheric music helps. As does wine. Or gin.
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Squidge replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Thanks Kate, Mad.
Actually, I reckon your way would work too, Mad. I suppose it depends what it is you’re trying to emphasise in the opener – for me, it was the fact that Tilda’s been trying to get this bloomin’ illuminorb right for so long, whereas depending on how you worded the next bit, your suggestion might focus attention on Silviu and his…[Read more]
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Squidge replied to the topic On a more positive note… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Ta, Jules. I’m working on the theory that this quilt can be reversible, in that the visible spirals on the ‘back’ are just as lovely as the mixed coloured stripes on the ‘front’. A lot still to do though.
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Mad Iguana replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
It’s great, Squidge! My personal taste would have been to start with:
“By Tilda’s twenty-sixth attempt to produce an illuminorb, Silviu’s patience…”
But I can’t say that would be better (in fact, it’s grammatically very awkward… so probably worse); it’s just how I would have done it. Otherwise, a cracking piece with a ton of world-building and…[Read more] -
Daedalus replied to the topic Short Story Publication/Competition in the forum Podium 7 years, 7 months ago
Nice one, well done Elle 🙂 Just off to have a read
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Elle replied to the topic Short Story Publication/Competition in the forum Podium 7 years, 7 months ago
Actually had a piece published today on Reflex Fiction if anybody wants to have a read, here’s the link:
https://www.reflexfiction.com/a-ghost-story-flash-fiction-by-laure-van-rensburg/
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Mad Iguana replied to the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 7 months ago
Just noticed that people may not realise that by “I” in the post above, I mean the “@denofwriters” twitter account, which I’m currently curating.
I don’t mean my own personal twitter account, which tends to be less polite and helpful. -
Daedalus replied to the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 7 months ago
Good idea, Mad. Can’t think of anything right now, but will rack my brains. Would be great to see others’ suggestions
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Mad Iguana started the topic Writing Advice in the forum The Writers' Lifeboat 7 years, 7 months ago
Anyone who’s been on Twitter may have noticed that I’m tweeting out some small nuggets of writing advice that I’ve found helpful.
I’m hoping to continue to do this on a semi-regular basis, but…
As I only have a limited number that are any use (if I had lots, I’d be a better writer than I am!), I wondered if any of the Denizens here had any that…[Read more] -
Kate replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
I really liked this Squidge. Very immediate, straight into the action. Lovely voice. Thumbs up all around.
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Jules replied to the topic On a more positive note… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Lovely blog, Squidge. And your quilting is very impressive. What an amazing colour!
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Squidge replied to the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
Apologies for the formatting! That’ll teach me to cut and paste…
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Squidge started the topic As an opening… in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
…how does this grab you?
It wasn’t until her twenty-seventh attempt that Tilda finally managed to produce her first illuminorb.
And a good job, too, because by the twenty-sixth attempt, Silviu’s patience was wearing very thin. “Concentrate, Tilda,” the Ambakian powermage snapped.
“I am concentrating.” Tilda rubbed her palm against her…[Read more] -
Squidge started the topic On a more positive note… in the forum Blogs 7 years, 7 months ago
Just to make up for the rather morose blog I shared a few days ago about the demise of the cloud, here’s one that is decidedly more upbeat. And has nothing to do with writing except for having a shout-out for the Den!
(Promise I won’t post tons of Scribbles links – I’ll only post the writingy ones from here on in!)
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